Oh yeah... I really like this one, Ron. This is the kind of subject matter that I really like to see in poetry, this kind of allegory, I really like...
I think it would be more powerful without the second last stanza... I think it reveals too much about the meaning. That's just my opinion though. Love your description of the scene, the string of events... a real treat for the imagination.
Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.
~Percy Bysshe Shelley