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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-05-15 06:38 PM



Link me chained daisy days
To stretch past June
Where melted by July heat
They anchor into summer
That I might
Pull petals from each
Citing
she loves me
she loves me not
Until
a season should pass
And I
on find of buttressed
End of links
Put holdfast heart
To suns warmth
Replacing
hers

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regards2you
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1 posted 2003-05-15 07:05 PM



Ron,

It is so creative. I love it.

"Until a season shall pass"

Wow...sure is heart touching....

As is most of your poetry. Oops, guess that should be all of it. For, indeed it does.

Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat


Midnitesun
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2 posted 2003-05-15 07:09 PM


Hmm, petals pushed and pulled
one-by-one they fall
and when all are gone
will she be too?
But wait, there is another flower
awaiting....

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2003-05-15 08:21 PM


Hmmmmm ... whats this I find???
A post from you???
Hmmm.. must of been someone else named Capt Ron that told me he wasnt gonna be writing for awhile ...no need... no voices...
Nawww.. that must of been someone else?

(whats good for the goat is good for the goose)

heh

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2003-05-15 08:25 PM


Link me chained daisy days
===================
is that the same as yanking someones chain?  

* moth chuckling*

( even tho she knows she wont win)


*sigh* .. it aint easy being a moth  

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (05-15-2003 08:25 PM).]

Midnitesun
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5 posted 2003-05-15 08:48 PM


ROTFL at JM's chain yanking comment.

ah, the rites of spring

I remember the excitement and freshness of it, I think.

Nan
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6 posted 2003-05-15 10:41 PM


Here's hoping you've got some warm hot toddies for autumn then... I did enjoy this, Cap'n...
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7 posted 2003-05-16 11:09 AM


Ron,

Some interesting writing here.  A little difficult to understand, but that's a very good thing... I love poetry that forces the reader to think in order to get anything from it.  Did I get it you ask?  Yeah, I think so.  

quote:
Link me chained daisy days
To stretch past June
Where melted by July heat
They anchor into summer
That I might
Pull petals from each
Citing
she loves me
she loves me not


Looking forward to learning about love, and then...

quote:
Until
a season should pass
And I
on find of buttressed
End of links
Put holdfast heart
To suns warmth
Replacing
hers


Looking past it, to coping with loss?

Am I right here?  Please enlighten me, because I want to read this a few more times if there's anything I'm missing at all.

I'd give you the whole loved-your-poem you're-so-talented thing, but I think that should go without saying by now... your quality is always consistent in your poetry, Ron, I'm not going to waste your time reminding you how awesome you still are.  

Thank you for contributing to Sanctuary, my friend... great to see you in these walls.

Parasite

Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.
~Percy Bysshe Shelley

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2003-05-16 11:20 AM






Cpat Hair
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9 posted 2003-05-16 03:13 PM


LP...
close... think of the first part as an ending of love and a plea for it to last if even in a love me love me not way...

the ending a way to cope with loss..yes.... looking for the heat of summer a time not so soft not so much about rebirth to move past the pain and let that take the place of the wartmh of another....

JM... I think I said I would not be writing like I did before...not in quatity and not because the words would not let me ignore them... LOL... but yes the post is from me and yes I did say I might not write at all for a while....


Janet Marie
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10 posted 2003-05-16 03:40 PM


Well the moth is SOOOOO glad you didnt listen to yourself.

( now you know I wouldnt yank yer chain, dont ya)

I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality.
MLK

nakdthoughts
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11 posted 2003-05-18 02:08 AM


I always enjoy what you write, so I hope you never stop

M

Duncan
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12 posted 2003-05-18 04:18 PM


'Link me chained daisy days
To stretch past June
Where melted by July heat
They anchor into summer
That I might
Pull petals from each
Citing
she loves me
she loves me not'

Never cared for the odds much but guess it's not any different than tossing a coin each morning on waking, which I've grown rather adept at doing!     


gemjop
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13 posted 2004-04-09 07:16 PM




too good...

BUMP.

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