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JP
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0 posted 05-13-2003 08:00 PM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP


I've done the world a disservice.
I've shown the world me,
not all of me you see,
just shared parts and bits.
I've shared my ire,
and my biting wit.
I've shared my stern glare
my cutting sarcasm,
my litany of complaints.
I've shared my bitterness
my strife, my angst in life.
I've shared my dissonance,
my anger, distaste, and dislike.
I've silenced my foes
and bloodied those closest to me.
I've shared the worst,
the worst there is of me.
I've denied the world
a glimpse of my love
the glow of my inner light,
my constant desire to do right.
I've denied the world
through denial of myself.
I've not given in,
to compassion, love, peace.
I've railed against it all,
while resisting my soul's call.
I've shared the bits of offal
to my utter shame.
I've shared the worst of me,
and this has got to end.
I have so much more to give,
love, kindness, peace, joy.
I have spirituality and thought,
intelligence and compassion.
This is the me the world should see
this is the me they will.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

© Copyright 2003 JP Burns - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 05-13-2003 09:42 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

... Loveya, JP...
Poet deVine
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2 posted 05-13-2003 09:55 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I disagree. You had a wall up for a long time, but anyone with an ounce of heart could see behind it.
Sunshine
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3 posted 05-14-2003 11:27 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Well, I missed it...
where did it go?



Hugs!
Martie
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4 posted 05-14-2003 01:20 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Some things you just can't hide, JP...even though you think you have.  Everything has its opposite....and I see much of it right here in this poem.
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5 posted 05-15-2003 08:47 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Yes, that's a very familiar feeling for me as well... I can relate.  It's almost shameful when you consider all of the things you could have done that you didn't, the kindness you could have shown when you chose not to... but this is the disservice of the world, and not just of us.  This is the way that everybody is.  A face staring towards their destination on the transit bus, not smiling at anyone, a constant expression of seriousness about them.

I happen to think your disservice, as most people's, is simply done in context... the only chances the world ever gives us to be kind are few and far between, and they're hard to spot...

I'm sure you are a kind man, JP, and there's nothing wrong with expecting people to dig a little in order to find that.

Just my little bit of input.  

Oh, and I also like the way this was written.  Not usually something I can enjoy, but this style was intriguing and didn't lose my interest.

Parasite

Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.
~Percy Bysshe Shelley

JP
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6 posted 05-15-2003 12:10 PM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

Thanks LP, thanks to all of you.  Your comments are appreciated and taken to heart (damn, I think I'm tearing up... SERIOUSLY!)

LP your compliment on my style was much appreciated, remarks from an artistic master like yourself go a long way to boost my ego (the ego I am trying to diffuse BTW...)

Y'all are awesome.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

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7 posted 05-15-2003 06:33 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

I've silenced my foes
**********************
probably not for more than a day or so *chuckling here* LOL

Many ducks have had more manure rolling off their backs than what you've dished out.
(my opinion, anyway)
But I'm sure anyone who felt your sting will appreciate the feelings you've offered in this post. You're a good man.
JP
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8 posted 05-15-2003 07:59 PM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

Ouch!

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

 
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