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Prove of My Love

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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 04-26-2003 09:07 PM       View Profile for aries_luv_ppl   Email aries_luv_ppl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit aries_luv_ppl's Home Page   View IP for aries_luv_ppl

Prove of My Love

Reading is relaxing
Reading is a game of mind.
You think it is hard, but it is not.
But until you start reading you know not
The hidden prize and scenery it brings along.
Reading is but a game
Of mind fantasy and food.

You dig and dig and think you know a lot
At the end you only find you know not enough.
Reading is an addiction;
Once started mind is engaged.
Reading is but a curiosity
Of past and future beholders.
Reading is my love.

Reading is my lover,
My life enjoyment.
It enriches the hue of my sky
And paints my footstep and stepping stones.
Reading is my love.
If I ever feel discouraged from it.
I will always refer to this song-

Prove of my love.

(c)April 25, 2003
Eliza Simmons

Side note: This is yet another self talk song.



Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

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1 posted 05-01-2003 09:32 PM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

This is a nice poem, very inspirational.  But really, why did you use the phrase "prove of my love"?  Is it not Proof?  Perhaps I am missing something.  But other than that, I really liked this poem.  It really breings reading home, affirming something that we all enjoy as avid readers, right guys?

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2 posted 05-03-2003 02:56 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I too think the word you're looking for is "proof."

I think this is a nice idea for a song, and what images you do use are quite fitting, but at the same time I would have liked a bit more detail on what you were talking about... a bit more focus on reading, what it does, why it is your love...

Also, I'm going to be honest and admit that I think the ending is kind of weak... turning around at the end of a song and observing the fact that it's a song is kind of non-conclusive.  Then again, I don't really know a lot about songwriting, so maybe you should just ignore me...

Nice writing, and thanks for contributing to Sanctuary.

Parasite

God becomes as
we are that we
may be as he
is
~William Blake

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