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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2003-04-25 01:29 AM


Checking With Reality

Looking up in the eyes of
My reflection in my mirror,
Scanning data, I want to
Check the reality from my eyes.

Listen up I don't have
The kind of happiness giving does.
I never feel the touches,
The sensation of sharing.

I wonder why I don't love.
I have a family of loving
Yet I learn nothing from them,
Not a single affection.
Now tell me whether I belong to theirs.
How can my heart begin to

To melt...

To melt into blazing fire,
Burn out all the rotten self,
And heat up the flame
Of inborn goodness...in me.

How can I survive in
This world with me being a loner?
How can I be touched
And take my life back on track?

I wonder why I don't love.
I have a family of loving
Yet I learn nothing from them,
Not a single affection.
Now tell me whether I belong to theirs.
How can my heart begin to

To feel gratitude.

To feel reaching out is not sacrifing
And that love not being returned
Isn't such a big deal, in comparing
To the joy, of seeing a smile... on your face.

Tell me how I can survive
Without loving through my life?
Tell me how I can be touched?
Will I walk through life with a blank page.

Tell me how I can survive
As a loner on this earth?
Tell me how I can be touched
And take my life back on track again.

Tell me...

(c)April 24, 2003
Eliza Simmons

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

© Copyright 2003 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2003-04-25 12:32 PM


I see you as a very warm soul, full of love. The reflection in the mirror you see is a bit clouded. Want some window cleaner? LOL, don't mena to make light of this Eliza, but I think you are much more full of LOVE than you realize.
BTW, this was a very good write!
hugs, Kacy

aries_luv_ppl
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Posts 1448
Universal Mind
2 posted 2003-04-25 04:31 PM


Thanks for your nice comfort and compliment I'm trying to look on the brighter side. Actually today I just wrote one that is more positive.

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

Local Parasite
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Transylconia, Winnipeg
3 posted 2003-04-26 12:04 PM


You know, being a loner isn't such a bad thing, really... if you can get over the initial loneliness, and just appreciate the individualism and independence that comes with the whole loner package, then you'll probably find it's rather easy to cope with.  

I've always said that most people on this planet aren't worth knowing.  As a loner, you're given the wonderful opportunity to see past those who aren't worth your time and let in only the truly interesting, truly worthwhile minds.  You'll find they're a lot like yours...

And if you don't find such fellow loners, in your time alone... rest assured, with time they'll find you.  I know this first-hand.

All it takes is comfort... comfort with yourself, comfort with eating lunch alone at your own table, comfort with sitting around reading a book during your breaks.  Your heart will melt more accurately when you are selective enough to feel as you are... as though you can't love, despite all the love you're given.

Cool poem, by the way... I like the formatting, and the little isolated lines from place to place.  This is really rather good... thanks for posting in Sanctuary.

Parasite

God becomes as
we are that we
may be as he
is
~William Blake

aries_luv_ppl
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Posts 1448
Universal Mind
4 posted 2003-04-26 01:21 PM


thanks Parasite for your comforting words OH and thanks for the compliment. I was attempting to write a more lyrical like poem with this one.

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

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