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Of Decay: The Prostitute

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fractal007
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0 posted 04-19-2003 04:22 AM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for fractal007

love peels away
the rocky putrid eyes
fall away as the cold
gritty death takes hold.
gone to our dismay
the long awaited sighs
fall away as the cold
gritty death takes hold.

I've seen this moment time and time
again throughout these years I've lived.
I always knew this day would come,
from birth to death and 'round again.

when will I obey
the lustful call of death,
which seeks to hold at last
my sensual body?
he'll enter in that day,
steal the kiss of my breath,
and seize and hold at last
my sensual body.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
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1 posted 04-20-2003 10:31 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Trying my best to figure this one out.  Let me read it a few more times...

Oh wow... this is just awesome, Frac.  I absolutely love your descriptions, your use of repeated lines, this piece overall.  I saw a woman aging, decaying, and despairing after her lost life.  You wrote this perfectly.  I'm adding it to my library.

Excellent work, man...

Parasite

God becomes as
we are that we
may be as he
is
~William Blake

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2 posted 04-20-2003 04:45 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

This is truly wonderful writing, I loved the repeated lines, they were used brilliantly and the whole peice, it was so well crafted, so beautiful and such a delight to read.

Keep up the great work

Andrew
 
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