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fractal007
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0 posted 04-11-2003 05:34 PM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for fractal007

sitting there yelling
my dream is realized now
i love my husband

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
--Smit
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1 posted 04-12-2003 04:29 PM       View Profile for skyshine   Email skyshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit skyshine's Home Page   View IP for skyshine

Oh.

~Liz

Waited on a line of greens and blues, just to be the next to be with you..
~Mr. Big

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This is sad, or bitingly sarcastic, or realistically ironic... that's why the tiny formats are fun - they're so unclear that they're difficult to read.

I remember when you used to dot all your poetry with senryus here or there... in fact, I remember ripping that off a few times myself.     It's good to see you in this line of poetry again.



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may be as he
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Thanks for the comments guys.  Yeah, I guess I wrote this as a senryu because it's so much of an observation/pausing and reflecting type poem.  Glad I pulled off the sarcastic irony I intended.

BTW, like your William Blake quote, LP.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
--Smit
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4 posted 04-13-2003 04:42 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

I just loved this, great writing.
 
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