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Deathbed (updated)

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0 posted 03-04-2003 07:54 PM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

Hey guys, I reposted this here as a view to my updated life - three years have passed since I wrote this and I am still alive - my daughter has graduated and I am feeling better than ever.

Fifteen years ago
the doctor called
you and I sat together
as he explained the results
of that fateful bloodtest
You sat stunned
I'm sure not fully comprehending.
The only thing I could say was
"Okay, when do I die?"

At the birth of our first,
we rejoiced and cried,
waited six months and tested,
and again rejoiced and cried.

Four years later, our miracle second.
More rejoicing, less crying.
six months later tested and smiled.
Three years later, counts are low,
"Okay, when do I die?"
No, just take these meds...

Four years later and one more.
another miracle, another reason to rejoice.
Again, six months, test - Negative.
Old hat this, but still rejoicing.

Year later, counts extremely low.
Illnesses come and go,
odds are becoming low,
Finally I let people know.

Three more years to see
my first in cap and gown.
Preferably not from my

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

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1 posted 03-05-2003 11:04 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Hi JP...I am so glad that you are still alive, even though I don't know you..I do know this struggle.  
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2 posted 03-06-2003 12:10 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I'd be lying if I said I understood this struggle, because I've never experienced it myself, nor do I know anyone who has.  It must require a lot of strength for you to endure the prospect of death, as you've demonstrated yourself doing.  I'm happy to hear that your children are alright, and that you're still alive, regardless of how long you've got left.

The prospect of death can be so powerfully inspirational and moving, and I'm certain that it can give you an edge in your poetry.  John Keats, for example, wrote some of his most powerful work while he was aware that he hadn't long to live.  Dead at 26, his words are revered even now, almost 2 centuries after his time.  Immortalize yourself in words, and death cannot threaten you.

Nicely written, and I wish you all the best.


"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

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3 posted 03-06-2003 04:35 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

This is a wonderful peice of poetry, very well written and a plesure to read, thanks fo sharing.

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4 posted 05-22-2003 01:26 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

this kinda sent me shock waves through my body and was quite a humbling experience...i always subscribe to the mistaken concept that i'm sure is unpredictable huh?

all the best for later years

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