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Song for Aremus

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fractal007
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0 posted 02-28-2003 09:51 PM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for fractal007

Five years ago
the eyes of Trei
looked down on me.

Aremus we judged;
she bore the enemy,
and so we cut her off.

It was my proudest achievement,
the jewel of my career,
but she left us fighting.

I'm certain the crater beyond,
that rape of a desert plain,
was left by a rock that shone
on me when I could love.

And I expect
no forgiveness
for that murder.

"If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"
-- Magus
"there is no good and evil, there are just sides."
-- Local Parasite

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knightlyshadows
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1 posted 03-04-2003 03:56 AM       View Profile for knightlyshadows   Email knightlyshadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for knightlyshadows

quote:
'm certain the crater beyond,
that rape of a desert plain,
was left by a rock that shone
on me when I could love.

And I expect
no forgiveness
for that murder.

I always enjoy reading from you fractal. Another very nice write from you, though it leaves me curious. Nice signature, btw.

A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.
"You can't fight the tears that aren't coming.."

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2 posted 03-04-2003 07:53 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

This is great writing Fractal, It reminded me of something but I can't remember what, anyway I really enjoyed the read.

Andrew
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3 posted 03-06-2003 11:58 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Is this more of your fabricated mythology bleeding into your poetry, Frac?  I love that... most poets get lazy and look for Gods of popular myth, and use them as their own to try and perk up their writing (I've done it once or twice myself with that YHWH guy).  But you make allusions to creations of your own mind, which I absolutely love.

That aside, I really enjoyed reading this.  Terrific stuff.  

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

fractal007
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4 posted 03-07-2003 12:29 AM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

Heh, I never thought of it that way, LP.  Thanks for the compliments.  I suppose I am alluding to my own "fabricated mythology."  Great fabricated term on your part, btw, LOL

"If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"
-- Magus
"there is no good and evil, there are just sides."
-- Local Parasite

 
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