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fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

0 posted 2003-02-28 09:51 PM

Five years ago
the eyes of Trei
looked down on me.

Aremus we judged;
she bore the enemy,
and so we cut her off.

It was my proudest achievement,
the jewel of my career,
but she left us fighting.

I'm certain the crater beyond,
that rape of a desert plain,
was left by a rock that shone
on me when I could love.

And I expect
no forgiveness
for that murder.

"If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"
-- Magus
"there is no good and evil, there are just sides."
-- Local Parasite

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

1 posted 2003-03-04 03:56 AM

quote:
'm certain the crater beyond,
that rape of a desert plain,
was left by a rock that shone
on me when I could love.

And I expect
no forgiveness
for that murder.

I always enjoy reading from you fractal. Another very nice write from you, though it leaves me curious. Nice signature, btw.

“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”
"You can't fight the tears that aren't coming.."

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2003-03-04 07:53 AM

This is great writing Fractal, It reminded me of something but I can't remember what, anyway I really enjoyed the read.

Andrew

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

3 posted 2003-03-06 11:58 AM

Is this more of your fabricated mythology bleeding into your poetry, Frac? I love that... most poets get lazy and look for Gods of popular myth, and use them as their own to try and perk up their writing (I've done it once or twice myself with that YHWH guy). But you make allusions to creations of your own mind, which I absolutely love.

That aside, I really enjoyed reading this. Terrific stuff.

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

4 posted 2003-03-07 12:29 PM

Heh, I never thought of it that way, LP. Thanks for the compliments. I suppose I am alluding to my own "fabricated mythology." Great fabricated term on your part, btw, LOL

"If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"
-- Magus
"there is no good and evil, there are just sides."
-- Local Parasite

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