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Riley
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in the pouring rain


0 posted 02-28-2003 06:11 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Riley

Tiny children scream out
Pain engulfs them
Wait....
Because thatís what they do
They hurt, we take it
Itís in their blood
Not mine, or yours
Theirs....
All colors blend together
Like the painting on my wall
Now itís torn
Does this remind you?
lash out hatred
looks upon the faces
they are scared
you were wrong
soon be gone.......
hands shake to the moon
as the blood pours out
and we all survive on one
this is who we are.....
as meant to be
our character white

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

[This message has been edited by Riley (03-02-2003 06:24 PM).]

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This one struck an eerie chord with me.  I hope it gets into the book.

"If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"
-- Magus
"there is no good and evil, there are just sides."
-- Local Parasite

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2 posted 03-02-2003 05:26 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

I like it.. one comment though, at the end you write
"this is who were are.....
as ment to be"

Is that a typo? meant and we?
Just wondering, because if it is, it will go into the book if you don't change it.

-Lynne
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3 posted 03-04-2003 08:01 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Great write thanks for sharing
Chloey
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in a silver mustang convertibl


4 posted 03-04-2003 08:42 PM       View Profile for Chloey   Email Chloey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chloey

oooh yeah i read this at school! I like it a bunch good luck! you got my vote fo sho'!

I write what I feel and I feel what I write.

         *~*Chloey*~*

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5 posted 03-06-2003 12:05 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

This is some great stuff, Ri... your style is nicely demonstrated here, and your underlying message, well, I'm going to read this through a few more times before coming to a conclusion.  I'd rather talk to you about it than influence anyone else's reading with my own interpretation, so I'll just say nicely done.

And while I don't think this is your best poem, not by a long shot, I still consider it good enough to appear in Reflections.  I'm voting.

Parasite

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(big hugggsssssss) Oh Riley, this is very haunting and poignant, sweet friend, I too pray for all these innocent people and that this violence can all just fade away and we cna all survive without anxiety! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Riley, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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