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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 02-23-2003 08:46 AM       View Profile for aries_luv_ppl   Email aries_luv_ppl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit aries_luv_ppl's Home Page   View IP for aries_luv_ppl

Tick-ta, Tick-ta,
Alone in my room
Listening to the...regular beats.

The sky is covered
By the black cloth
Smoothly spreaded
As a roof of the city.

There must be two angels
At each end of the sky
Holding... the cloth
Making waves-
And the waves would be our clouds
Waltzing across in beautiful grace.

Each clouds has different shapes,
Like the variety people in the ball.
But all are imaginative reflection of thoughts.
And being one of them,
I shall not feel alone anymore.

Just when I was in my happiest hour,
A bird awake me in her whisper.
I'm alone
   Again...
In my room.

~Every girl has a dream within.

© Copyright 2003 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-26-2003 01:00 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

When I was a little boy, probably around 8 or 9, I used to pull my bed over by the window so that I could fall asleep in the starlight... I'd spend most of those nights, before sleeping, with my eyes opened and watching the sky.  I live in the city so it's difficult to see the stars, with the streetlights and pollution and whatnot, but I still got a great deal of comfort just gazing up at that black cloth and watching clouds and clouds of smoke just walking by.  

This poem brought me back there, to when I was young and naive enough to fantasize about something fantastic, such as angels holding a cloth at either end, in the sky... and when that bird would whisper me awake, I too would frown, because I was so happy just being alone and dreaming with my eyes open.

Thank you for the memory.  I'm putting this in my library, because I'll like to read it again sometime in the future... just to bring me back there again.  

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

aries_luv_ppl
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2 posted 02-26-2003 03:17 PM       View Profile for aries_luv_ppl   Email aries_luv_ppl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit aries_luv_ppl's Home Page   View IP for aries_luv_ppl

glad you like it It is amazing how nature works!

~Every girl has a dream within.

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3 posted 04-15-2003 04:43 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

I really liked the concept for this poem, the idea of a black and two angels really appealed to me. Thank you for the great read.

Andrew
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4 posted 04-16-2003 10:48 AM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

nicely done.  The images created... then the subtle let down as waking pushes out those images... well crafted.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

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