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Janet Marie
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0 posted 02-05-2003 11:01 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

Ok Kari and Ron...you win      


         


Encompassed Destination


Somewhere between degrees
of latitudes and longitudes
lies the distance that now
defines, denies, and directs her.  

White lined lanes and runways
wind endlessly into the horizon.
Miles of mapped and compassed
concrete and clouds. Highways
that bend and curve like her need.
Roads that rise like the lonely
and the ache that drives her.

On a day that holds winter too tightly
and frigid winds frost her words ...
she whispers across the distance
calling to the warm sand reverie that
holds her heart in tide taken requite.

No amount of nights spent
in front of the fire will ever
season her senses like the sharing of
sunrise saturated shorelines sated her.

The same degrees of distance
that now deny her, will eventually
lead her farther on ...

Destination:  
36 N. Latitude 76 W. Longitude

She'll have no need of maps ...
her heart knows the way.



         


         
      

Chesapeake Bay
36 N. Latitude 76 W. Longitude


"Up where the mountains meet the heavens above
Out where the lightning splits the sea
I would swear that there's someone ...
somewhere watching me
Through the wind and the chill and the rain
And the storm and the flood
I can feel his approach
Like a fire in my blood"

~Bonnie Tyler~


~~~

thank you Capt for the spark and gift of inspiration...
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum76/HTML/002896.html


[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (02-06-2003 03:22 PM).]

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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


1 posted 02-05-2003 11:07 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


The alliteration alone speaks volumes...
wind that up with a heart on the wind...
and you have brilliance...
Cpat Hair
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2 posted 02-05-2003 11:18 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

no thanks neccessary... the read of it alone enough to satisfy any need.

now...go write another.. ( laughing)

Martie
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3 posted 02-05-2003 12:11 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Janet Marie

The heart's map is the best kind and the most beauiful.  
Lady In White
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4 posted 02-05-2003 01:37 PM       View Profile for Lady In White   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady In White


It doesn't hurt
to write...

it only hurts
when you don't.
Local Parasite
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5 posted 02-05-2003 03:56 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

YOU... and your fancy alliterations!  Sometimes I forget to remember those things when I'm writing, but they seem like a second nature to you.  You always mix your letters around so beautifully, even in looser poetry formats.  Your skill with words really makes me jealous, girl.

I'm on these really stupid computers at school that won't let me copy/paste, and I'll be damned if I'm copying your poem out word-for-word, so forgive me for not including block quotations in my reply.  I'll just give you an overall impression.

Gotta say, your introductory stanza is just perfect.  It says everything that the poem expands on, all in four well-composed lines.  Meets every standard for an introduction, it's almost essay-like.  Absolutely splendid.

The whole poem dives right into the imagery aspect, you describe every last aspect of the scene to the point where I can picture it myself (without the need of your visual aids... I always read your stuff in the "topic review" window because your pictures are so gosh-darn distracting).  

Her interaction with the environment just completes the package, bringing the character to the setting, letting the two mingle and dance.  I especially like how you wove her actions into the environment, saying the cold winds "frost her words," adds to imagery and tells a story all at the same time.

Everything you write, JM... it's like you're right there, talking from all your senses about every thought that enters your mind.  I admire your style so much, I was going to post something after reading this, but now I'm reconsidering... think I have to go work on it a bit...

Next time you go to Chesapeake, phone me up... I could use some of that inspiration.  

Brian

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

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6 posted 02-05-2003 05:51 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Dang!  You are amazing!
This is amazing...
Thank you for this beauty!
May we have more please?
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

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with you


7 posted 02-05-2003 06:09 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

your heart, will always lead you home.
you know I love this
Kit McCallum
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8 posted 02-05-2003 07:43 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Well now, Janet Marie ... how on earth did I get so lucky to find 2 from you today!!!

The beauty and inspiration of your latitude and longitude flows all the way out to these coordinates in the chilly north. Lovely visuals, JM ...

"No amount of nights spent in
front of the fire will ever
season her senses like the
sunrise saturated shorelines sated her."

and I love your closing ...

"She'll have no need of maps ...
her heart knows the way."

No maps required, indeed, when the heart knows the way inherently. Beautifully written, gator gal ... a treasure.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

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9 posted 02-05-2003 08:17 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I've read this about five times now...and that's just in THIS thread!

and Kari and Ron win?

no, lady, we ALL win!

I still don't know what to say...you bare the soul so beautifully and with such grace that after reading I feel stunned silence. I TRIED to do the scansion but found myself scrolling up and down and sideways smiling.

YOU...are so beautiful...
Janet Marie
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10 posted 02-06-2003 12:26 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Kari....your reply has a brillance all its own..and reads like poetry...
thank you for your encouragement( blackmail) to post this LOL
thank you for being you.

Ron ... tis always a gift when one poets words sparks and stirs anothers muse...
when its my moody muse its nothing short of a miracle LOL So YES...thank you is called for. You and poetess sun are quite the team when it comes to "supporting" (threatening) me to post ROFL   thank you poet sir....muchly.

Martie... thank you sweets...you know me so well.
Janet Marie
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11 posted 02-06-2003 12:27 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Lady... sometimes its heaven and hell....and dont mess with the Sun and the Capt when they ask ya to post...hell hath no fury LOL... thank you poetess of the white.

Brian.... you just are too good to me mothy muse...thank you so much..me thinks we have a mutual admiration going on...cuz Im always envious of your writing...
thanks for giving me your insight on this...forgive you for no cut and paste? OK...I wont even tell your teach that your cutting class to play in poetry land
thanks so much groovy guy.

Nancy... MORE? Im still in shock me moody muse gave me 2 in the same month LOL.. thank you so much for your sweet reply poetess enchanting.

Sea... yes girlie...I know.. thanks so much...Im loving the inspiration found in the ocean blues.
Janet Marie
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12 posted 02-06-2003 12:28 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Kit ... well how did I get so lucky to have a smile waiting to happen on both my poems??? LOL .. thank you groovy gator girl.

KA....you smiling is whats beautiful...thank you me twin...you make me mothy heart glow with such loving support of my work. love ya


thank you all for kind words and support...
Thank you again and again to Mark for the gift of the blue waved memories that continue to pull the tides of my pen and my heartstrings.

Duncan
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13 posted 02-07-2003 07:36 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

'On a day that holds winter too tightly
and frigid winds frost her words ...
she whispers across the distance
calling to the warm sand reverie that
holds her heart in tide taken requite.'

Hey Jams
Great poem.  Don't know how I missed it!     (Talk about nagging...)
Janet Marie
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14 posted 02-08-2003 12:18 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

me thinks ya just like to wander in late and make a big entrance.

hoot_owl_rn
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Absolutely beautiful
Janet Marie
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16 posted 02-13-2003 12:25 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

thank ya Hoot-girlie...and its absolutely beautiful to see you here.

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17 posted 02-13-2003 09:33 AM       View Profile for Sunkissed   Email Sunkissed   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sunkissed

I can't even begin to express how deeply this poem touches me.

Love it!

Sunkissed.
Janet Marie
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18 posted 02-13-2003 10:52 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

thank you so much for stoping by Sunkissed, nice to see you here again. Seems like its been awhile, or maybe I'm out in the blue
thanks for letting me know how this touched you.

      
" ... and I never saw blue like that before."

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19 posted 02-14-2003 06:56 PM       View Profile for BloomingRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BloomingRose

So glad I found this.  
Beautifully written! Just wish I had a tiny bit of your talent for writing.

Deb
 
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