Oh, I like... let me read it once more in topic-review.
I would have liked more description of the lover/dead body, but otherwise, interesting notion... I especially like "breaths balloon away from us," and that double-meaning about loss of breath (the dead body simply dies and the person discovering it is breathless from shock).
I like the poetic rings of this one more than your coffee poem, but think the duality isn't so nicely exaggerated as it was in the coffee one... oh well... each has its own merits. Personally I like this one more, maybe because it didn't catch me off guard and cause me to mourn the loss of a beautiful love poem...
"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche