I haven't read anything from you in the longest time, Riley. I'm glad I found this. I envy you're ability at free verse. It's one of my favourite ways to write, but I can't seem to pull it off anymore. (if I ever did ;p ) One of the main things I did like about this, though, is the fact that you /did/ use the father and daughter bit. You don't see that often.
I really enjoyed these two parts:
my daddy always told me the moon made me gorgeous...
...from now until i am two i had promised
to be prime and proper
looks like promises can be kept
for two and a half minutes
Loved how you tied it together with the ending and the italics added a nice touch to that line. ^^ Great write Riley. Hope to see you writing more again.
“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”
..You can't fight the tears that aren't coming..