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knightlyshadows
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obscured vision


0 posted 01-08-2003 05:51 AM       View Profile for knightlyshadows   Email knightlyshadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for knightlyshadows


shortlived crush, of butterfly winged
whisper on my flesh. tickled eyelash
kiss of air upon my lonely cheek. palest
flush in crimson raw spread up to
touch thy face.

gentlest touch in lover's new, afloat
in love's closed eyes. bruised on
lips, warmest breathe flowed in to
quench thy thirst.

blind of sight, to all but this
woman's whispered rush. moisten tips and
touch this flesh, scrap finger to wanton's
well. harbor dream of sultry sound, soon to
greet thy love.

warmth inside, a silken web spun tight
around a tock. grip of night, blind in day,
left only in briefest time. drown in sleep, then,
bluff thy death.


This one, sort of.. well, sucks. No title, but suggestions are welcome.

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (01-08-2003 05:52 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 Tiffany Durham - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-08-2003 03:31 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I've read this about six times.  I just keep having different gatherings every time I try to interpret this poem, Tiff.  I'm not sure what to think of it exactly.  One thing's for sure... you've made me question the worth of my vision.  If I could have read this with my eyes closed, I would have.  

Sometimes I think it would be very nice to be blind in day.  You've touched me with this.

Brian

It's amazing the effect ice can have on the world.
~Allysa

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2 posted 01-09-2003 07:35 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

I agree with Brian, it is a bit hard to understand. I think it's about a shortlived love, however. That's how it came across to me, anyway. It's a nice piece, though. I like your imagery, very good.

Peace I leave with you, My peace I give unto you: not as the world giveth, give I unto you.--Jesus Christ

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