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Cover-up

Happy, bright blue paint
peels in cancerous patches
exposing solid steel beneath.
Dry rotting of ex-veneer
quietly, slowly defeated
by created beauty within.

Oh, who would appreciate
nakedness of bare metal
as pleasant, even lovely?
Quickly they come marching
covering with deception
layers mindlessly applied.

Incognito by cruel brush
peek-a-boo patient, nay victim
dreams of sand-blasting savior.
Happy blue paint and bare metal
defeated by time, both by rust
a master or martyr cover-up?

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1 posted 12-31-2002 12:58 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

Hmm. Have you ever read Zen and the Art of Motorcycle Maintenance? I am right now and it sorta reminded me of it...that is, if a motorcycle's actually what you're alluding to...erm. This was veery interesting and I'm sure I'll have to go back and read it more than 3 times to actually grasp all of it, but for now I know I do appreciate the great control of the language you've used...This is subtle, but I think I'm starting to get the whole deal of it. And it's sad. *sigh* Anyway, keep writing, I'll be sure to keep looking.
  ~Carly

A ruddy drop of manly blood
The surging sea outweighs;
The world uncertain comes and goes,
The lover rooted stays.

Ralph Waldo Emerson
        

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2 posted 01-01-2003 02:41 AM       View Profile for Tramp Poet   Email Tramp Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tramp Poet's Home Page   View IP for Tramp Poet

Carly,
seems this piece has spoken to you on a few levels, thank you. i guess the "bare" root would be metal vrs paint and in the end, time will get both.  the question that remains is, as always, of point of view.
Lol in my own opinion...  
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3 posted 01-01-2003 12:07 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine


Or..this could be a metaphor for a woman who uses a lot of makeup? LOL

In it's 'basic' meaning, I see that we are looking at the beauty of the natural state versus the 'painted' beauty which over time peals away to revel the 'real' underneath. (Was that right too?)
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4 posted 01-01-2003 05:22 PM       View Profile for Tramp Poet   Email Tramp Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tramp Poet's Home Page   View IP for Tramp Poet

hey Sharon,
yeppers could be metaphorically anything or anyone, lol, that has layers of stuff that
is designed to enhance or hide the trueness
underneath.  And the fate that awaits both in the end. And of course the utimate question of which is/was which.  The point of view question would the basic view one would carry in day to day existence, i suppose...glass half full kinda stuff?
  
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Interesting poem on car repair and maintenance.  Seems to be a new way of looking at the phrase "don't judge a book by it's cover."  You do a good job discussing the idea of the car being rusted as being possibly "better" than one might think.
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Actually, I find much beautfy in rust, and also think tarnished silver preferable to shine..it IS all in the way you look at it.  Enjoyed reading this!
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thanks guys...
appreciate the input.
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8 posted 01-05-2003 04:28 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I love the subject matter you bring up here... "cover-up" of what we see undesirable.  The true form of steel is masked by the untrue form of paint, which is what is celebrated... and not the steel...

I hate being painted...
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9 posted 01-05-2003 06:34 PM       View Profile for Tramp Poet   Email Tramp Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tramp Poet's Home Page   View IP for Tramp Poet

exactly!
and dreaming of sand blaster savior to get all that junk off! no matter how many "painters" are out there...
POV...does one relate to the steel or the paint?
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"cancerous patches".. "marchig".. "peek-a-boo patient" .. this is GREAT as per usual Daniel. ^_^ It's good to finally catch up with another of your poems, I lost you there for a while!! ^^

Lynne

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hey Lynne!
yeah long time...
thanks for the comment.
lol was wondering if anyone would catch some of those metaphors...tis very nice to see the different layers folks have seen...
good hearing from you!
hugz
 
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