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Alwye
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In the space between moments


0 posted 12-26-2002 11:26 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alwye

Okay, so it's been a long time since any poetry has come to me...I'm a little rusty, but here it is.

Ebony Curves

With shivering fingers
I trace her ebony curves.

I have known her…like this
So many times before
My hands feel the way
Fluttering here…and there…
Unlocking her mysteries.

She sings with my touch.

A rhapsody of silken sound
Weaves within my soul
As we merge in melody…
My voice knows the way
Rising here…and there...
Joining in her beauty.

The notes crescendo golden
And then fall away
Like some honeyed reverie…
But I’m reassured that soon
My hands will drape soft
Upon her ebony curves
Once more.



*Krista Knutson*

"If we have no peace, it is because we've forgotten that we belong to each other." ~Mother Teresa

© Copyright 2002 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 12-26-2002 11:43 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

YOU'RE BACK! YAY!!

It's been a long time since I've had the joy of reading your work, and I'm glad I don't have to wait any longer. I really enjoyed this piece... I especially love the refrences to music. When we connect with people on a deep level, it is indeed a melody. Wonderful writing!

Peace I leave with you, My peace I give unto you: not as the world giveth, give I unto you.--Jesus Christ

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2 posted 12-27-2002 12:01 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Thanks Erica, it's great to have the poetry come.  Even if it is about my guitar, LOL.  Some way or another, the music in me comes out.  Thank you for your comment, I'm so glad to hear from you!  

*Krista Knutson*

"If we have no peace, it is because we've forgotten that we belong to each other." ~Mother Teresa

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3 posted 12-27-2002 04:20 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Hey Krista... nice to see you and read you beautiful. Have missed you.

This is really very beautiful and owning a guitar myself I know exactly what you mean here.

Love it.

Maree
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4 posted 12-29-2002 02:01 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

hey Alwye, I've missed reading from you.  Great to see you active in Sanctuary.  

And yup, just as I expected, this is an excellent piece of poetry.  You do it every time.     I love your personification, the vagueness you used... how you shrouded it just enough to gain my intrigue, but not so much that I became lost with it.  Sometimes I have the problem of over-shrouding my poetry so that I haven't left enough hints to even make my intent for the poem valid... never the case with you.  

A subtle, passionate and romantic poem... I haven't put something in my library in a long time.  

Parasite

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~Allysa

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5 posted 12-29-2002 07:52 PM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

A beautiful description of the merging one can feel with a musical instrument.  This is a very interesting poem, with a subtle hint of sexuality that further helps in emphasizing the creative activity involved in music.

I have known her…like this
So many times before
My hands feel the way
Fluttering here…and there…
Unlocking her mysteries.


This is an especially good example.  It is almost Biblical, possibly alluding to Adam's knowing of Eve.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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6 posted 01-05-2003 09:53 PM       View Profile for quietlydying   Email quietlydying   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for quietlydying

from the very beginning the words you chose seemed to have an almost musical aspect to it.

and then i read further and you actually started to venture down that path.

it pleased me.  it was a very enjoyable read.  thank you muchly.

/jen/

'i don't care if it hurts, i want to have control.  i want a perfect body, i want a perfect soul.'  [radiohead]

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7 posted 01-06-2003 12:12 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

For a music lover it was a perfect idea to write this seductively.. this is a beautiful piece Alwye - I enjoyed it.

-Lynne
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8 posted 01-13-2003 12:26 AM       View Profile for Dusk Treader   Email Dusk Treader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dusk Treader

What a passionate piece of poetry you've sculpted here. An extremely sensuous poem, which is definitely appropriate for those moments of creation. Your subtlety is beautiful, leading us along with glimpses so that we can piece together the whole, truly quite enjoyable, dear.

"A hard, cold wisom is required for goodness to accomplish good. Goodness without wisdom always accomplishes evil" - Robert Heinlein

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9 posted 01-13-2003 12:41 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Your muse away? I think not... Your work is Alwye's exceptional...
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