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0 posted 11-30-2002 11:39 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LoveBug

I don't know about this...
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My nerves are killing
I think of the past few weeks
All the pent up pain
The tension
Carrying so much alone

I stand before them
Closing my eyes for a moment
Imagining myself alone
Just me
And Him

Iíve got it to an art
So when I open my eyes
No matter who is before me
It is still just me
And Him

My song begins to come
Itís not just my control
Itís not just a gift
Although it is, in a way
A gift from God to you

It is also a gift
A gift from God to me
When all the pain
When all the stress
Is just too much to bear

I sing...

Smooth out the kinks in my soul
Clean it out
Make it right
Dear God, I pray
Sooth my spirit today

Dear God, give me song
With each note
Iím smoothed
With each stroke...
Brushed into calm

Most of us go to our grave with our music still inside of us.

© Copyright 2002 Erica N. - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 12-01-2002 06:06 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Lovely writing, Erica.  You've very nicely expressed your state of mind in this particular situation, the tension beforehand, and the relief that comes aftewards.  

Nice work.  Thanks for using one of my phrases.

Parasite

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~Aldous Huxley

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2 posted 12-01-2002 10:44 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

*smile*

music... can cure many things (unless i'm the one singing!)

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3 posted 12-04-2002 02:35 PM       View Profile for banburycross   Email banburycross   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for banburycross

i liked the poem more and more as i read it, and it is a sentiment that i definetely agree with.  James taylor has always been my person favorite when it came to singing for comfort.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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4 posted 12-23-2002 10:46 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

I love to sing too...there is a release in it, a kind of abandonment almost...I liked the way you went from tension to song, then to the release you felt.  It's been too long since I've read something of yours, old friend.  

*Krista Knutson*

"If we have no peace, it is because we've forgotten that we belong to each other." ~Mother Teresa

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5 posted 12-25-2002 12:25 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

Hey Erica. I've missed ya. This started out as a reader-cringe sort of poem..but then was completely transformed into the reader-happy-sigh sort...you've done very well with this one. I'm glad I got to read it.
  ~Carly

A ruddy drop of manly blood
The surging sea outweighs;
The world uncertain comes and goes,
The lover rooted stays.

Ralph Waldo Emerson
        

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This is a cool little poem about facing a crowd when performing a musical act.  I like your interplay between God, speaker, and audience.  You do a good job in examining the various facets and dynamics of that relationship.

Sorry, but I am a bit too tired to find holes in this piece right now.  Perhaps I will "lash out" at it tomorrow sometime...

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

 
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