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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738


0 posted 2002-11-22 02:57 AM


yes...

silence.sound.presence.absence.lifepulsating
awake...and sleep?
smiling
you go rest
        I'll pace.

even absent...you are there.


symbiotic
  amniotic
    brine of life
an egg is cracked...

all the defenses of shell
  crumbled
    I concede my lack
arms in reach of that I beg

BREATHE--
   to not do so is sin...

aquatic
  dancing...a narcotic
    lance of eros
the shell yields...

CONCEIVE--
  or die-a roach on back.
legs in writhe of a protest

no...

silence.sound.presence.absence.lifepulsating
        
        death...and breath
        of gasp...some air?
        you go live...
        i'll go die...

We are...creationism's pair.



© Copyright 2002 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475
usa
1 posted 2002-11-22 09:47 AM


damn.......
you are incredible
thank you

Local Parasite
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Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg
2 posted 2002-11-22 10:19 AM


Wow... I really wish I could figure out how you get such a powerful, strong tone in your poetry... maybe if you tell me your secret, then I might give you the secret of my perfect flow...   hehe...

A truly great piece of poetry.  I'm very, very impressed.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2002-11-22 11:06 AM


You're on a definite roll lately..where are you getting your inspiration?
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-11-22 12:22 PM


It flows thru her veins....poetry...rhyme...inspiration.
When she bleeds...its cadence and metaphors...pure poetry.

I'm not crazy, I'm just a little unwell
I know right now you cant tell
but stay awhile, maybe then you'll see
a different side of me

MB20

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

5 posted 2002-11-22 12:40 PM


I am choking on my coffee here..

sputter--whoa.

shaking my head...

This was just a piece of conversation, evolved, and would not have been written if  a certain someone had not taken my head and made me LOOK, saying, "DUMMY. THIS IS POETRY." (thanks bri... )

And LP? no secrets...if there is a secret to why and the way I write? that's it. No secrets. Kinda funny you should ask that, as that was part of the aforementioned conversation...I just sit here and don't really think of anything but life, and then when I write? I just use words to invite the reader into my realm--that's all. It's sort of like: "C'mere, I wanna show you something..." Now? TEACH ME METER DAMMIT.

Sharon...the inspiration is in ALL of you...and I know, e mail ya soon. I'm sorry--life has a way of getting in the way of me sometimes.

Jan...you...have got to be the sweetest woman. I keep you in the same place in my heart that I keep my favorite poems. MIRROR baby. Everything you say to me? is YOU.

love to you all...

mmmmm...yummy stuff you guys--I'm hugging me.

Thank you.

bsquirrel
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

6 posted 2002-11-22 01:29 PM


Drink deeply that "brine" of life.

Loved this, serenity. You keep growin'.

Mikey

quietlydying
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the wonderful land of oz
7 posted 2002-11-22 05:34 PM


hear that?

that's the sound of me, speechless.

i feel as though i've died and gone to heaven.  no wonder they call this the poetic haven.  

everything i've read in here...  this is the best of the best.  cream of the pip crop.  heh.

you never cease to amaze me serenity.



/jen/


i'm so bitterly disappointed.  betty, i think it's time you leave now.

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (11-22-2002 05:35 PM).]

Kielo
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since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109

8 posted 2002-11-23 12:44 PM


An amazing poem, Wi... Of course, I think just about everything you write is amazing, and you encourage the idea wonderfully. Thanks.

Kielo

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

9 posted 2002-11-23 04:04 AM


always amazed, I am...

the generosity of you good people astounds me.

whisper *thanks*

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