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serenity blaze
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0 posted 11-22-2002 02:57 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

yes...

silence.sound.presence.absence.lifepulsating
awake...and sleep?
smiling
you go rest
        I'll pace.

even absent...you are there.


symbiotic
  amniotic
    brine of life
an egg is cracked...

all the defenses of shell
  crumbled
    I concede my lack
arms in reach of that I beg

BREATHE--
   to not do so is sin...

aquatic
  dancing...a narcotic
    lance of eros
the shell yields...

CONCEIVE--
  or die-a roach on back.
legs in writhe of a protest

no...

silence.sound.presence.absence.lifepulsating
        
        death...and breath
        of gasp...some air?
        you go live...
        i'll go die...

We are...creationism's pair.


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brian sites
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1 posted 11-22-2002 09:47 AM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

damn.......
you are incredible
thank you
Local Parasite
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2 posted 11-22-2002 10:19 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Wow... I really wish I could figure out how you get such a powerful, strong tone in your poetry... maybe if you tell me your secret, then I might give you the secret of my perfect flow...   hehe...

A truly great piece of poetry.  I'm very, very impressed.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

Poet deVine
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3 posted 11-22-2002 11:06 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

You're on a definite roll lately..where are you getting your inspiration?
Janet Marie
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4 posted 11-22-2002 12:22 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

It flows thru her veins....poetry...rhyme...inspiration.
When she bleeds...its cadence and metaphors...pure poetry.

I'm not crazy, I'm just a little unwell
I know right now you cant tell
but stay awhile, maybe then you'll see
a different side of me

MB20

serenity blaze
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5 posted 11-22-2002 12:40 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I am choking on my coffee here..

sputter--whoa.

shaking my head...

This was just a piece of conversation, evolved, and would not have been written if  a certain someone had not taken my head and made me LOOK, saying, "DUMMY. THIS IS POETRY." (thanks bri... )

And LP? no secrets...if there is a secret to why and the way I write? that's it. No secrets. Kinda funny you should ask that, as that was part of the aforementioned conversation...I just sit here and don't really think of anything but life, and then when I write? I just use words to invite the reader into my realm--that's all. It's sort of like: "C'mere, I wanna show you something..." Now? TEACH ME METER DAMMIT.

Sharon...the inspiration is in ALL of you...and I know, e mail ya soon. I'm sorry--life has a way of getting in the way of me sometimes.

Jan...you...have got to be the sweetest woman. I keep you in the same place in my heart that I keep my favorite poems. MIRROR baby. Everything you say to me? is YOU.

love to you all...

mmmmm...yummy stuff you guys--I'm hugging me.

Thank you.
bsquirrel
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6 posted 11-22-2002 01:29 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Drink deeply that "brine" of life.

Loved this, serenity. You keep growin'.

Mikey
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7 posted 11-22-2002 05:34 PM       View Profile for quietlydying   Email quietlydying   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for quietlydying

hear that?

that's the sound of me, speechless.

i feel as though i've died and gone to heaven.  no wonder they call this the poetic haven.  

everything i've read in here...  this is the best of the best.  cream of the pip crop.  heh.

you never cease to amaze me serenity.



/jen/


i'm so bitterly disappointed.  betty, i think it's time you leave now.

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (11-22-2002 05:35 PM).]

Kielo
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8 posted 11-23-2002 12:44 AM       View Profile for Kielo   Email Kielo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kielo

An amazing poem, Wi... Of course, I think just about everything you write is amazing, and you encourage the idea wonderfully. Thanks.

Kielo
serenity blaze
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9 posted 11-23-2002 04:04 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

always amazed, I am...

the generosity of you good people astounds me.

whisper *thanks*
 
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