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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz 
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You can see a man’s fortune in his dental work - or lack there of. His short-comings and cravings. His deadly addictions. /jen/ i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now. |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Not to be corny or anything---but the only interpretation I have on this...I can't put to words! But somewhere deep down inside, I just wanna say: Interesting peice, nicely done. I obviously haven't gifted myself by reading some of your other works! Tyhla du dra piyd uv so seht! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
you know what? this hit me hard. Look in some folks mouth and you can see what they had for breakfast. sigh. I can see the coffee and cigarette addiction right in the mirror (so no, I don't find tooth whiteners absurd) But I lead up to what haunted me most about this--look in someones's mouth and see the missing teeth, and the face that looks melted beneath bags holding up eyes? I guarantee, you are looking at a heroin junkie lucky enough to make it to middle-age. and smiling at you, /jen/-- I got all of this out of that. I'd love to write with you some time. You have a certain seriousness that might counteract "my imp"--  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Powerful. And I love that you spelled it there of instead of thereof. Mike |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Awesome title, Jen. I like this poem... don't look in my teeth though, you won't see anything special. I don't have enough addictions to keep them interesting. Just a crooked incisor on the left side.  Parasite Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
One of the best titles I've seen, Jen....and the poem is so right-on. You CAN learn so much about a person from their teeth. As you point out, their cravings certainly come out. Also the cleanliness of their teeth indicate how they want to present themselves to the world and whether or not they care how the world perceives them. Good dental work means one thing...cheap or bad dental work another. You can know how successful they were in life by their teeth. You can know if they pay attention to details, if they put out effort to take care of things and make them last, if they have self-pride....I could go on and on. Your poem is so right........ |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Jen... Marvelous, and true  My tooth is chipped, but that just means that I play sports and grind my teeth *grins* |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
ahhh...but zee BREATH! zee breath iz zee kill-her of all tings good! This kicked butt...I feel like walking around and quoting it like a smart-arse.  you rock. Are you scared? |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great write Jen |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
I just relized I could come here now =P.. And I really enjoyed this poem.. Great write!Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Bloody smashing, Gwen. Loved it. ~Titus  "On the plains of Hesitation lie the blackend bones of countless millions, who, at the verge of victory, sat down to wait, and waiting - died." |
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