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quietlydying
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0 posted 11-21-2002 12:30 AM       View Profile for quietlydying   Email quietlydying   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for quietlydying

You can see a manís fortune in
his dental work -
or lack there of.

His short-comings
and cravings.

His deadly addictions.

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed.  betty, i think it's time you leave now.

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1 posted 11-21-2002 01:31 AM       View Profile for Android 17   Email Android 17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Android 17's Home Page   View IP for Android 17

Not to be corny or anything---but the only interpretation I have on this...I can't put to words! But somewhere deep down inside, I just wanna say: Interesting peice, nicely done. I obviously haven't gifted myself by reading some of your other works!

Tyhla du dra piyd uv so seht!

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2 posted 11-21-2002 02:58 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

you know what?

this hit me hard.

Look in some folks mouth and you can see what they had for breakfast.
sigh.

I can see the coffee and cigarette addiction right in the mirror (so no, I don't find tooth whiteners absurd) But I lead up to what haunted me most about this--look in someones's mouth and see the missing teeth, and the face that looks melted beneath bags holding up eyes? I guarantee, you are looking at a heroin junkie lucky enough to make it to middle-age.

and smiling at you, /jen/--

I got all of this out of that. I'd love to write with you some time. You have a certain seriousness that might counteract "my imp"--

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3 posted 11-21-2002 02:18 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Powerful. And I love that you spelled it there of instead of thereof.

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4 posted 11-21-2002 03:13 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Awesome title, Jen.  I like this poem... don't look in my teeth though, you won't see anything special.  I don't have enough addictions to keep them interesting.  Just a crooked incisor on the left side.  

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Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

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5 posted 11-21-2002 10:27 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

One of the best titles I've seen, Jen....and the poem is so right-on. You CAN learn so much about a person from their teeth. As you point out, their cravings certainly come out. Also the cleanliness of their teeth indicate how they want to present themselves to the world and whether or not they care how the world perceives them. Good dental work means one thing...cheap or bad dental work another. You can know how successful they were in life by their teeth. You can know if they pay attention to details, if they put out effort to take care of things and make them last, if they have self-pride....I could go on and on. Your poem is so right........
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6 posted 12-10-2002 09:20 PM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

Jen...
Marvelous, and true

My tooth is chipped, but that just means that I play sports and grind my teeth *grins*
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ahhh...but zee BREATH! zee breath iz zee kill-her of all tings good!

This kicked butt...I feel like walking around and quoting it like a smart-arse. you rock.

Are you scared?                                      BOO! Are you now?

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8 posted 02-23-2003 08:11 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Great write Jen
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I just relized I could come here now =P.. And I really enjoyed this poem.. Great write!

Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart.

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10 posted 02-26-2003 03:36 PM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

Bloody smashing, Gwen. Loved it.

~Titus

"On the plains of Hesitation lie the blackend bones of countless millions, who, at the verge of victory, sat down to wait, and waiting - died."
    

 
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