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serenity blaze
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0 posted 11-18-2002 10:42 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

They wonder why I don't keep time.
I watch the shadows in his eyes.
I wake up to "Dick Van Dyke..."
each night I watch "Jack" axe "the shine"--

A distance just ain't natural--
I have a hopeful bent in me.
But I am just a hungry child,
weeping outside bakery.

I am starved for want of touch...
a tender hand and just a smile.
I hate myself for eagerness--
pathetic--I have been defiled.

But even a dog on a chain
is grateful for a bit of bone.
A child will let a stranger in
when she is often left alone.

I am the pegs of bumper pool--
all of them, they bounce from me.
Then they place the blame of miss--
when English is what's blasphemied.

I feel chips of me are gone
from years of bouncing ball.
Featherless, an angel falls--
and tears of love become a psalm.


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Local Parasite
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1 posted 11-18-2002 10:55 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Wow, powerful writing, Serenity... a lot of feeling in this one.  I love the image of the angel taking a plunge in the end... very tragic, morbid even...

Very nice writing.  Just hope you still have some feathers.

Parasite

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2 posted 11-18-2002 11:16 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Oh my. I've oft been that child that opened the door - this speaks...and not just to me!
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3 posted 11-19-2002 01:51 AM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

bit of bone
stranger

no, wren.....
serenity blaze
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4 posted 11-19-2002 01:56 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

the stranger, love, IS HIM.
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5 posted 11-26-2002 02:30 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

feel chips of me are gone
from years of bouncing ball.
Featherless, an angel falls--
and tears of love become a psalm


too much in here to talk about... but the whole of it is also too close to ignore...

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6 posted 11-26-2002 07:02 PM       View Profile for Kielo   Email Kielo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kielo

I was just about to leave, because I have work to do... then out of the corner of my eye I saw the first line of the following quote.

I am starved for want of touch...
a tender hand and just a smile.
I hate myself for eagerness--
pathetic--I have been defiled.

You blew me away, so here I am, breathless, crawling back to say well done.

Kielo
 
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