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serenity blaze
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0 posted 11-07-2002 06:47 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

"footsteps are cliche'"
she said.
She took the cork
within her mouth.
She pulled it
till she heard the pop--
then she spat it out.

"footsteps are cliche'"
she said...
"someone?
light my cigarette?"

She clenched a butt bent in her teeth.
Taunting
in bad bitchery...

"FOOTSTEPS"
she insisted sweat.

Then she guzzled
sangria--
footstep stomp
of language--
upon a parchment's
bottled prey

to wash up on
a sand filled prayer:

"footsteps, yes,
they are cliche..."

"And legs?
are dreams
of gravity..."

Footprints--
imprints
in the sand...

A hollow
of myself

she sang

footsteps
follow me

in stand...

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-07-2002 06:51 AM).]

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1 posted 11-07-2002 01:07 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I'd like to know your friends.
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2 posted 11-18-2002 12:43 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Another one that makes my brain hurt.  Boy Serenity, I think I'm so smart and then I have to read your poetry...

Although one thing I DO know I can critique is the idea of footsteps.  Kinda cliche.  Maybe it's just me?  

 
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