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brian sites
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0 posted 10-28-2002 02:03 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for brian sites

I look at myself
in my
mirror
and see the bloated roiling mass
of lies and contradictions
armors of past predictions
shape-shifting ghosts
            of self-definitions
and I am disgusted
and as I turn away

            a flash
                      did I see?
in the dishwater eyes
a
         "don't leave me!"
cry
(a child's voice)
quickly smothered
and clouded over
YES
YES
I heard you
and I am coming......

I arm with a scourge
no---
two
I name them
Sick and Tired
and face
the thing that would be me

It shrieks in the dawning awareness
that this is not a joke
my cleverly constructed self-defeating yoke
wants to live
I will not give
mercy
raise my weapons and CRACK
the skin
        CRACK
              the sins
CRACK
      the gray
                CRACK
                      the hate
splitting atoms
into mist
an orgy of self
destroying this filth
THAT DARED TO USE MY NAME

I don't stop until it's lies are cooling
on the floor
and I kick through it's remains---

"Are you here?
      I know you are"

(muffled sobbing)
       and I lift a flap and there-----
dirtied
bloodied
but alive
I gently pick up this fragile form
and wash it
with my eyes
cradle it
            my original self
and whisper

you are free.......

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1 posted 10-28-2002 02:42 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

"I gently pick up this fragile form"

I wish you could see who I see.

This is YOUR "Jeremiad" baby.

You just let it out--doesn't it feel good?

smile...see? you are free.




[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (10-28-2002 02:45 PM).]

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2 posted 10-28-2002 02:56 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

oh...this one of those goosebump reads--and you KNOW what that means--;

yep *tgh*
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3 posted 10-28-2002 04:17 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I love this Brian!! Did you ever read 'Swan Song' by Robert McCammon? It's about a nuclear war. After the fallout ends, some people start growing a horrible, heavy mask over their face. When it's cracked, their true selves are revealed.

Now that yours is cracked, you can see what we've seen all along. A beautiful, kind man and a wonderful writer.
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4 posted 10-28-2002 06:18 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

brian

It takes courage to clean off and out, over the years so many things grow callus of misconception.  I admire this poem, and the poet.
brian sites
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5 posted 10-28-2002 11:58 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

love-- I wish it were so
       but this body? is a hard habit
        to break.....thankyouIamyou
love2-- mmmmm-hmmmm yes
Sharon-- I use to read McCammon a dozen or
        more years ago, but I don't remember
        that story. Is it more recent?
         and OH! you are too kind lady
         a humble thankyou
Martie-- Yes and I was tired of merely
         filing that callous down
          it was time to cut it off
            Thank you, very much
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6 posted 10-29-2002 01:50 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

The thing that gets me?
That this is a daily occurence...
brian sites
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7 posted 10-29-2002 02:33 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

no Mike
the title ?
another lie, cop out, blahblah
the title should have been
"a much too often for my taste chore"
but that seemed a little too cumbersome
shrug
thank's dude
 
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