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Poet deVine
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I wait
breathing desperately
assigned to this bush
wait for the red
they said
aim
carefully
I agree within
my dread

A test of my skill
or of my
bombast
or just another
rifle
waiting
for dawnís first blast

This is my
war
not my fatherís
this is my
life
of freedom
horizon gathers

Then itís time
the red
appears
he is young
not what
I expected
heís like me
in every way
except
heís misdirected

I have him
in my sight
my rifle
on my shoulder
can he hear me
breathing
behind my
sheltering boulder

I close my eyes
shoot
then run
without
knowing
if he is shot
home beckons
my stumbles
am I brave
no
I think not.

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1 posted 10-12-2002 03:40 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I love the weight, depth and urgency of this poem, Sharon. Like little bullets for the mind...

I'm going to think on this over the weekend, and try to have a revolution poem of my own for Monday.

Long live the cause!

Mikey
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2 posted 10-14-2002 10:43 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

THIS is my favorite...even though I understand why you clarified the intent...I liked it better as an ambiguous metaphor...but that's just the comanche in me relating here...

I really DO love this'n, as you already KNOW---must be some kind of PERSONAL issue with me, huh?

love you!
 
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