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serenity blaze
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0 posted 10-10-2002 12:54 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

I wondered often
what he heard in his head
when his eyes would focus so intently
to something just in front of him
so real to see him
holding up his end
of a conversation just for Brother Tim.

Once I had to try
to touch that space
just to assure myself
that there really was no one there--
so I stood in front of him
planting my eyes to his
but Brother Tim simply re-focused
and talked in murmer to the air above.

Being me, and knowing Tim,
I simply asked him then,
"pardon me for interrupting,
but just who in the hell are you talking to?
Brother Tim, held up one hand
as if to gesture "just a sec"
and looked at me so serious
and simply answered "God."

ooooo-kay....
and I excused myself.
I didn't want to interrupt.

Tim had this way of showing up
with some adventure on his mind.
So I really wasn't surprised to see
his truck in my drive
with five lawnmowers in the back.
I didn't even want to ask
so I just watched
from behind the blind
as he pulled one over
the side of the bed
(Brother Tim is pretty big)
and yanked that cord
to start 'er up
and proceeded to mow
my neighbor's
already-trim lawn
just slightly shorter
than before.

He mowed in a design
of every other row--
leaving a pattern of basket
waiting to be woven--
and then I saw him stop,
and put the lawnmower back into
the bed of his red truck.

Well now I had to know,
so I went outside
and caught him
cranking the engine to depart--
"Tim, oh Tim..." I shook my head.
"Why did you do that."
He smiled at me and pointed up
and said:
"God told me to."
I just sighed and said to him
next time you want to love thy neighbor,
get some of your own.

So I was not the least surprised
that he was picked up by authorities
standing in the Mississipp
fishing in a storm warning.

I heard he tried to explain
that he had authority
to be there from
another
up above--
He was fishing for the Lord...

They said he tried to explain
that the reds were running
and that he knew
because he had this chip
from the government
planted in his nose,
and how it made his
sinuses drip
when reds are running
as he pointed to his snotty nose.

They are holding him for "observation."
I'm sure he'll give them much to see.
I wonder if they'll ever look
up his nose
just in case...
I wonder if they'll ever see
anything that can explain
the visions of suburban prophet--
and there was a part of me
that laughed with glee
when I read the paper that proclaimed
Redfish are abundant now.
Advising all who might partake
to grab a rod
and "capture the moment."

After all, I thought with wink:
"who nose?"

*     *    *
http://www.nola.com/archives/t-p/index.ssf?/sportsstory/venledein09.html

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (10-10-2002 12:57 PM).]

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1 posted 10-10-2002 01:21 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

the line runs out....
and?
Pip's place Marina?
weird...
awesome, you
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2 posted 10-10-2002 06:33 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I will sink my time
and my coins
into this verse,
let them spin around a bit,
and come back --

hoping their ain't no chip in my nose.
Maybe I'll go mow the ocean?

Damn I'm incoherent right now.

My apologies.

Love the continuation/revision/

revisitation.

RedFishSquirrelFish
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3 posted 10-11-2002 09:02 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

Brother Tim.... quite a story... Youknow of course if they find that chip, it will be denied.

good write Ser... enjoyed the telling!
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4 posted 10-11-2002 09:04 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

This is such a wonderful poem, I really enjoyed the read, one for the library me thinks

Always and forever

serenity blaze
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5 posted 10-11-2002 05:56 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

My bri...my oh my--you are either the only one who followed the link, or the only one who noticed--but nothing gets by YOU--and wasn't that just the damnedest thing? *shaking my head* I told someone once, when they said they didn't believe in magick to follow me around for two weeks--and that would be all the proof they need. grinning--as yanno, stuff like this happens to me so often...I'm not even surprised anymore. (ssssh...c'mere--looking around-- --sneak attack)

Ron? Thanks much for reading...and since you knew the story beforehand, I appreciate your taking the time to hear it twice.  

Mikey? mow the ocean...hey? well...I'll leave that up to you!   Thanks.

Andrew? What a lovely surprise you are--and now that I think about it, I'm sure you do wear your jeans quite nicely.   Thanks for reading!

and poor Tim---I do wish he'd stay on his meds...sigh.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (10-11-2002 05:57 PM).]

 
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