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Elizabeth Cor
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since 10-13-2000
Posts 906
Oregon (yeah!)


0 posted 07-11-2002 07:56 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Cor   Email Elizabeth Cor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Cor

i awoke
2am exactly

the wind a song of vampires,
zephyrs thick like water eddy over
the skin

and i answered the call to wander
inside the warmth and shadows

touch a bare
mind to this
worry of mine for awhile

and you may know only
the exaggerated face,
enormous metaphors
and extravagant language

to place against
what drives or inspires
or moves

but if you think
i can
fill my endless
leaves of paper
with any careless infatuation
or focus

how sorely mistaken

there is power,
a compulsion cum might
which may not ever touch
the
fleshy bands of heart
beneath another chest

but know, how rare
the stirring

to write, to fall from dreams

and trace the long lines of
sleeping streets
in and out of obscurity

  both for the pull of a weight
(curled like a child to every thought,
clasping, breathing softly)
that seems to mix in my blood
until simple existence itself is heavy

heavy, but not cruel

imaginings
stretched against the sky,
i thumb out
Venus,
reach as though my hands will
prick the tiny star
like a needle,
same as my feet lead me home:
subliminal yearn
for a space where i will find you

this ache is pure,
without remorse or
the bleaching defeat of
a relationship broken

the feel of
something good gone
but not lost

not lost, but feeling as far
from my touch
as the dust of stars overhead

again, with you,
i have earned a new emotion:
grief.
© Copyright 2002 Megs - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 01-22-2000
Posts 18986


1 posted 07-11-2002 09:20 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

but know, how rare
the stirring

to write, to fall from dreams


===========================
this ache is pure,
without remorse or
the bleaching defeat of
a relationship broken


the feel of
something good gone
but not lost


not lost, but feeling as far
from my touch
as the dust of stars overhead

again, with you,
i have earned a new emotion:
grief.
=====================================

and it will be your new muse too..that is inevitable ... but so very very necessary...
(part of the process) ... in light of our conversation, one verse in this beautiful outpouring spoke to me...

the feel of
something good gone
but not lost


never lost...not so long as we touch the "traces left behind."
This (grief) may be " new to you" ... but in your own words...by your own words...
I know you already understand.
heart-hugs dear poetess.
jm

Elizabeth Cor
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since 10-13-2000
Posts 906
Oregon (yeah!)


2 posted 07-24-2002 03:38 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Cor   Email Elizabeth Cor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Cor

jm... hi. you know that letter that's in my inbox that's still waiting on a reply? yep. its' remembered often lol... and I don't know if I'm ever going to come up with something I find "suitable" to say... but when the words come (even inadequate ramblings) I'll send them...

~smile~ thank you for rushing in and giving this quiet little night-poem your attention... and let me say that I'm tenderly impressed by your constant genuine nature and warmth to each poet here... hugs, back & thanks ever so much... you are one of few that make this a great place to be, know that.
Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 06-15-99
Posts 7276
Mobile, AL


3 posted 09-01-2002 11:56 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Just why the hell is this at the bottom I wonder.

You know...this spoke to me..LOUDLY and this particular part jumped out at me mostly because I identify with some part of it somehow or another and because its all damn good writing anyways.

"...both for the pull of a weight
(curled like a child to every thought,
clasping, breathing softly)
that seems to mix in my blood
until simple existence itself is heavy..."

Damn! You do this well.
'


"

"two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light
a duet done with passion"

excerpt from "I Love You"

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 02-02-2000
Posts 28839


4 posted 09-02-2002 12:02 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I wanted to highlight every line of this---o m'lady, where have you been?

Thanks Jenn, for throwing this one in my oblivious face.

Reading this was like running my fingers through silken thought.

Extraordinary.
Sunshine
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Member Caelestus
since 06-25-99
Posts 67715
Listening to every heart


5 posted 09-02-2002 09:24 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

to write, to fall from dreams

~*~

Elizabeth, your critique encourages your readers to "be mean".  I have a hard time with being mean.  It's just not in me.

If you don't mind, I will just say that this particular line touched me, and stands alone.  

Thanks!
bsquirrel
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Member Rara Avis
since 01-03-2000
Posts 8382


6 posted 09-04-2002 03:57 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Liz,
As they say,
bloody marvelous.

Me
serenity blaze
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since 02-02-2000
Posts 28839


7 posted 09-04-2002 04:00 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

ain't she grand? I just adore her...
wranx
Member Elite
since 06-07-2002
Posts 3778
Moved from a shack to a barn


8 posted 09-07-2002 09:55 PM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

Awed, here

*bows*

~wranx

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".      

~wranx~

 
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