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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Stones in the tide Make as much of a wave As these words I write Make upon your heart Plunk Plunk Plunk They drop to the bottom Like words weighed down With passionless Unused emotion Plunk Plunk Plunk Titanic tombs hold them Unsaid, unheard, unread Rocks in the ocean of blue They lie unwritten dead |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Ooo, I love these images, and the idea of the stones being dead messages! She said burn ... together. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  WOW!!! Once again your metaphors and figurative language are poignant and exceptional, sweet friend, I know this thought so very well and it too saddens me to see so much drown and like Atlantis sem to take forever to ever find and comprehend! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, I just am amzed by your fabulous view of all aspects of life, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Excellent choice of onomatopoeia. "Plunk" suggests something heavy plunging after plummeting a long distance... it makes that path through the air seem so much more real. I think you could have been a bit more hush about the real meaning of this poem though. You were a bit blatant. Just my opinion. Great write, PDV. Parasite Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I don't even remember writing this!!! OMG LOL Thank you for reading.... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Awaken, Sanctuary! AWAKEN! |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I too enjoyed the use of the world 'plunk.' the connotations of it added to the poem's meaning. Wonderful job, PdV, I'm glad someone dug it up!  *Krista Knutson* |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This seemingly contradictory poem is an excellent expression of what seems to be a frustration on your part. The speaker sees his words as having no effect on others, but then finally reveals that those words were never written. Nice job and one I'll be adding to my library. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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