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Poet deVine
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Stones in the tide
Make as much of a wave
As these words I write
Make upon your heart

Plunk
Plunk
Plunk

They drop to the bottom
Like words weighed down
With passionless
Unused emotion

Plunk
Plunk
Plunk

Titanic tombs hold them
Unsaid, unheard, unread
Rocks in the ocean of blue
They lie unwritten
dead
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Ooo, I love these images, and the idea of the stones being dead messages!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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WOW!!! Once again your metaphors and figurative language are poignant and exceptional, sweet friend, I know this thought so very well and it too saddens me to see so much drown and like Atlantis sem to take forever to ever find and comprehend! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, I just am amzed by your fabulous view of all aspects of life, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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Excellent choice of onomatopoeia.  "Plunk" suggests something heavy plunging after plummeting a long distance... it makes that path through the air seem so much more real.

I think you could have been a bit more hush about the real meaning of this poem though.  You were a bit blatant.

Just my opinion.  Great write, PDV.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

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I don't even remember writing this!!! OMG  LOL

Thank you for reading....
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Awaken, Sanctuary! AWAKEN!
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I too enjoyed the use of the world 'plunk.' the connotations of it added to the poem's meaning.  Wonderful job, PdV, I'm glad someone dug it up!  

*Krista Knutson*

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7 posted 12-28-2002 12:34 AM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

This seemingly contradictory poem is an excellent expression of what seems to be a frustration on your part.  The speaker sees his words as having no effect on others, but then finally reveals that those words were never written.  Nice job and one I'll be adding to my library.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

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