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The Firelight (from the challenge in the Haven)

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Poet deVine
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I peddled quickly over the hill
Smelled smoke in westerly breeze
And in the distance I saw the flames
Licking quietly above the frieze

Sunset seemed a false glow as
The firelight came thick and bright
Quickly I neared the cottage where
We pledged our passioní right

Old wood burns fast, tis true
It burned as though our loverís flame
And though the walls fell quickly
I could see them stand against my shame
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1 posted 06-09-2002 01:52 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Your writing has sparks and crackles. Thanks for the loving burns.

She said burn ... together.
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2 posted 11-13-2003 11:01 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I would like to hear more on this...

it's a sad intro, Shar, but just the beginning.

and if I'm ordering you around tonight, smile, add a little hope in there? grin...

mid life crisis yanno.

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3 posted 11-14-2003 10:22 AM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

well done
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I think Brad said it all!

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5 posted 12-07-2003 07:21 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Interesting depiction of a house fire, which reminds me of the many fires this past year in Arizona around Phoenix and Tucson. One thing which puzzles me is the last line. Was the 'shame' from the 'passion' right' or from something else...say setting the fire or leaving something unattended which started it?

Irregardless of my confusion there, this was a very well written piece. Kudos!
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6 posted 12-07-2003 11:03 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

a burning. . .or, to be burned??

lots more layers in this one then even I can see. . . great work. . .

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