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Poet deVine
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She rode an Arabian stallion
Out of the morning mist
The darkness of her hair
Matched the mane held in her fist

Clad in softest leather garb
Her skin of deepest tan
The goal for this immortal one
Was to find a mortal man

Her clan of immortal sisters
Would die out without this deed
So riding now, Ravenna sought
A man for his mortal seed.

Each village she approached
Seemed void of virile men
Haggard women stared at her
With looks beyond her ken

Farther from her clan she rode
Until she reached the sea
There upon the horizon was
The answer to this mystery

Four majestic ships lay cradled
In the azure waves off shore
Sunk low upon the ocean
Weighed down by the cargo they bore

A boat filled with captive men
Being hoisted onto the craft
Pushed and prodded onto the deck
Tied together fore and aft.

The need for mortal seed was great
One man was all she required
The rest would be a burden
Until a child could be sired

She strapped her silver dagger
To a pouch within her vest
Then jumped into the water
Swimming quickly to the west

She climbed the anchor chain
As quietly as she could
And slipped onto the deck
Where the night sentry stood

With a swoop of her wrist
The sentryís neck was slashed
Then she hurried to the hold
Where the village men were lashed

In the darkened space she sought
A man who would quicken her blood
She scanned the room until she saw
A tall and virile stud

With stealth she untied his legs
And bid him follow her out
Quickly he obeyed wondering
What this girl was about.

On the moonlit deck again
She cut the ropes from his wrists
Then led him into the ocean
And swam away into the mists

As they reached the sandy shore
Ravenna called her stallion forth
Bade the mortal to mount her horse
And rode off to the north.

The mortal man rode pillion
Arms clasped around her waist
His breath hot upon her cheek
She squirmed in his embrace.

The trip to the immortal camp
Lasted only a day and night
Ravenna wished her captive
Would at least have put up a fight

He seemed to sense his destiny
As father to an immortal child
But as he rode, he fondled her
Driving Ravenna wild

The leader of the clan
Took the captive to her cave
Until it was decided
Which member he would have

Ravenna paced all that night
Her passionís blood inflamed
The village stud had quickened her
And needed to be tamed.

Morning dawned fair and mild
The leader drew the clan near
And said the mortal man agreed
To bed an immortal here

Ravenna wished she would not
Be chosen to bed the man
For after seeding immortal wench
He met death by immortal hand

Ravenna mounted her stallion
And quickly rode away
She chose not to be the one
To bed the man this day

Two days passed as she rode
To banish him from her mind
And when she returned to the clan
His death had been consigned.
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1 posted 05-23-2002 01:15 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

bummer. poor guy.

this is cool sharon... i do have to say it feels kind of unfinished (i mean, i know the series is unfinished, but the ending here felt abrupt... prolly just me)

quote:
The village stud had quickened her
And needed to be tamed.
have to admit - this made me laugh... thinking about you and i

hugs
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2 posted 05-23-2002 01:28 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

wow...very intriguing read..both the poem and the reply!

Nice flow to this. Oh. Wait. I mean it's a gripping tail...er, TALE!  Um...NICE POEM..

(It's Christopher's fault...HE'S A BAD INFLUENCE ON ME...get the boy TAMED already!)



oh yeah...
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It feels finished to me. It's about the woman's plight more than the man's. I loved that she started falling in love (an' lust) with him. And ah love th' way y' write.

Keep on.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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I really enjoyed this, Sharon...went there in my mind as I was reading.  Really think she should have let him go, but sigh, that's just me.
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Karen - you're incorrigible... and i will NOT be tamed!
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6 posted 05-23-2002 02:53 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze



and hey...the Immortal Spirit of Ravenna told me that she wanted to stay up top! (wouldn't want this latest edition to get lost!)

and C? We can discuss the psychological aspects of dominance through submission later!



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7 posted 05-23-2002 04:09 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Oh...serenity types innocently...FORGOT TO ADD THIS TO MY LIBRARY!!!
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Chris you are the only 'stud muffin' in my life!! LOL

Thanks for reading my humble words...
 
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