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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
She sat alone, rocker in neutral her heart pounding in the night legs stiff from sitting there crying softly in her fright no one to come children gone no one to call to undo shoe lacings she stares into the darkened room seeing only crayon wall tracings |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I like the play of crayon wall, because it makes me think of canyon wall. I really enjoyed this one... She said burn ... together. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
now i'm gonna cry...  |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Here..have a Kleenex. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I can picture this one..I like *s |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I spy another one. Guess it wasn't just Mike and Chris.  When I was really little I would secretly go into my closet (it was a big closet) and write stuff all over the walls in red crayon. Nobody ever found it until years later, when I moved to the room downstairs. You've captured well the lamentations of a childhood expired. The image you present is haunting... an old house where children once grew up, now all gone, and a woman longingly gazing at their walls, and seeing old crayon marks, even if they're not there (I take it she's looking in and remembering it differently than it is, not literally seeing crayon marks). Very cool stuff, PDV. Parasite Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
These are from an 'open mic' night when we all had to write from the same phrases...it was FUN! |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
amen christopher. wow. i loved the take on this one. i'm really enjoying these wall tracings.  they're so vivid. alive. this was purely powerful. and that's all i have to say about that. [beautifully written]. and i won't say another word about punctuation today... promise! /jen/ i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now. [This message has been edited by quietlydying (12-02-2002 01:56 AM).] |
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