umm.. I like it.. I think the only thing I'm not too keen on with this one is when you write: "Your eyes are the door
(strangely not the windows)"
Obviously u r referring to the cliche of her eyes were like windows, but really, it makes me think of it without writing '(strangely not the windows)', because saying 'the door' is unusual. I actually really don't like that line, because it sounds.. young, compared to the rest of the poem, as thoguht u threw it in as an afterthought just to make sure we noticed that a door was differnt to a window.. BUT I love the rest. the last piece is especially good
It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.