Seven horsemen, riding tall,
Compassion leading the way.
Hope constantly by his side,
his companion night and day.
Truth riding up next, alone,
not needing any support.
Trust will always follow Truth
A lifelong cohort.
Hand in hand, inseparable,
Love and Beauty follow on,
leading the way for one more...
the end result of Freedom.
Hey groovy girl
youve got some really cool lines in this...
I love the truth and trust line ...
the first half of the poem reads well and the cadence and flow work...when I got to line 8 is where my reading lost its pace...
I think that line needs just a few more syllables.
The next lines are fine cadence wise...till the last line...I think it also ends a bit too abruptly..and part of the problem is the rhyming of "on" and Freedom" is a little forced, but its "do-able" if you can get your cadence back on the last line.
Or maybe try something like:
Love and Beauty are next to come,
Freedom is one of those hard to rhyme exact words...so you have to go with a similar sound. My hoosier St.Lou accent may not read the same as someone elses
Read it aloud and listen to the beat of your words.
I love the theme of this and your message.
hope this helps
good luck girlie-girl..ya cant go wrong with an Eagle poet-sir helping ya
You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes.
My body aches to breathe your breath ... your words keep me alive.