Well well well, I have to say - I liked it, alot. short, to the point, witty.
Don't tell Nan this (and Nan, if you're listening - no offense intended):
I could not stand the poetry portions of my English classes! One of my teachers was so oblivious to poetic form she felt that only work in iambic pentameter was acceptable.
Another teacher assinged us to write a poem whose only requirements were that it was more than 4 stanza's. I wrote this epic poem about the men's room "Gleeming white porcelin in the stalls, countered by graffitied walls. The way the toilets gurgle and flush, while on the floors lies a drunken lush..." All he had to say was that the subject matter was silly and he failed me.
Yes I am embittered about the lack of true poetic appreciation in the grammar and high school teacher's community! AAAUUUUUGGGHHHH!!!!
Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient