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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand 
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Road Kill Hedgehog. Headlights. It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
wow..that's a short one here...er, what was the incident that inspired this poem?  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I think she had a run in with a hedgehog!  |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
^_^ What inspired this one was my English teacher last year (whom, by the way, I could NOT stand,) was telling us that the best poetry is short and to the point, and gave us an example.. so I decided RIGHT I'll exaggerate it, see what I come up with. ^_^ And guess what. When I showed him, he didn't get it. Hehe, he said "So... what's the connection between the headlights and the hedgehog?" When told him it was a CAR and the hedgehog was KILLED, he says "Oh.. Hmm, I didn't get that from it.." and bumbled away.. Well, I had a big question mark above my head THEN! And couldn't help laughing.. Thanks for reading!! Luv ya It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
LOL..you really showed your english teacher who's boss! he must have been pretty embarrassed...plus this makes a good story to retell whenever he screws things up...but don't be too hard on him, will you? |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Hehe, he wasn't really the kind of teacher one COULD be hard on (he has since left the school - yep, after teaching my class, we scared him..  and gone to Japan), mainly because whenever someone tried to crack a joke at his expense, he never understood it. OH well, I have a great English teacher this year. ^_^It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold. |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Hmmm... what if the hedgehog was already dead? Should I kick it to make sure? haha.. great .. hmm.. words/poem... - James |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
That was almost a haiku. Enjoyed yr unique  on things.She said burn ... together. |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Hmmm. interesting........ - James |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Wow, I love this, sweet friend, I can feel the rebelliousness behind these words and I am sure too your teacher must have got blown away by this, for you write so well at short poems just as the real answer is that any honest poem is the best poem! (smiles) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lyne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Hah! Great stuff. Not at all what I was expecting. Personally, I don't care for poetry that's short and to the point, unless the point is an excellent one... and forgive me for not reading much depth into a hedgehog getting creamed by a car. Are you even still around here, Yu Lan? Poetic Haven weeps without you. Come back!  Parasite Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you LP.. yeah, I'm still around but only just!! I'll be making a bit more of a come back these holidays, because I've finished school now, and can spare more time for kicking my brother off the computer.. Thanks for missing me!! ^^ Love, Lynne It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
He didn't understand the reference between Hedgehog and Headlights? Sighhh. Gald you showed him Maree. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Hegemony! |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanks Maree.. yes, "sigh".. unbelieveable what some ppl miss! ^^ Hehe.. hegemony.. It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold. |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
hahaha!! that was great! it reminds me of a poem i once wrote. i was being overly harsh and making fun of someone, and yeah. i wrote a poem about roadkill, which was quite amusing. nicely done. /jen/ 'i don't care if it hurts, i want to have control. i want a perfect body, i want a perfect soul.' [radiohead] |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanks Jen ^_^ Hey, I'd like to read ur Road kill poem.. is it posted here? It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I just couldn't resist the title and I wasn't dissappointed, I'm really enjoying reading and writing short poetry and this was no exception, thanks for sharing Andrew |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Well well well, I have to say - I liked it, alot. short, to the point, witty. Don't tell Nan this (and Nan, if you're listening - no offense intended): I could not stand the poetry portions of my English classes! One of my teachers was so oblivious to poetic form she felt that only work in iambic pentameter was acceptable. Another teacher assinged us to write a poem whose only requirements were that it was more than 4 stanza's. I wrote this epic poem about the men's room "Gleeming white porcelin in the stalls, countered by graffitied walls. The way the toilets gurgle and flush, while on the floors lies a drunken lush..." All he had to say was that the subject matter was silly and he failed me. Yes I am embittered about the lack of true poetic appreciation in the grammar and high school teacher's community! AAAUUUUUGGGHHHH!!!! Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Interesting little poem. Quite comical. 2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2 |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Marshalzu - I was actually thinking of calling it 'Chinese Takeaways' for a laugh.. what do you think? Thanks for reading! JP - yeah, there are some horrific teachers out there.. Hehe, your poem sounds cool - have you posted it here?? I'd like to read it.. especially as your teacher failed you on it (how rude!) ^_^ Thanks Fracta, well, I certainly found it comical that my teacher didn't understand it, hehe..Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^ |
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