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Yu Lan
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0 posted 11-19-2001 01:51 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Yu Lan

Road Kill

Hedgehog.
Headlights.

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

© Copyright 2001 Lynne Miura, née Chudley - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-05-2002 04:11 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

wow..that's a short one here...er, what was the incident that inspired this poem?
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2 posted 05-05-2002 02:42 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I think she had a run in with a hedgehog!
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3 posted 05-08-2002 01:19 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

^_^ What inspired this one was my English teacher last year (whom, by the way, I could NOT stand,) was telling us that the best poetry is short and to the point, and gave us an example.. so I decided RIGHT I'll exaggerate it, see what I come up with. ^_^ And guess what. When I showed him, he didn't get it. Hehe, he said "So... what's the connection between the headlights and the hedgehog?" When  told him it was a CAR and the hedgehog was KILLED, he says "Oh.. Hmm, I didn't get that from it.." and bumbled away.. Well, I had a big question mark above my head THEN! And couldn't help laughing..
Thanks for reading!!
Luv ya

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

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4 posted 05-10-2002 12:56 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

LOL..you really showed your english teacher who's boss! he must have been pretty embarrassed...plus this makes a good story to retell whenever he screws things up...but don't be too hard on him, will you?
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5 posted 05-12-2002 06:50 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Hehe, he wasn't really the kind of teacher one COULD be hard on (he has since left the school - yep, after teaching my class, we scared him.. and gone to Japan), mainly because whenever someone tried to crack a joke at his expense, he never understood it. OH well, I have a great English teacher this year. ^_^

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6 posted 05-18-2002 08:37 AM       View Profile for jamesjiao   Email jamesjiao   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit jamesjiao's Home Page   View IP for jamesjiao

Hmmm... what if the hedgehog was already dead? Should I kick it to make sure? haha.. great .. hmm.. words/poem...

- James
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7 posted 05-18-2002 06:26 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

That was almost a haiku. Enjoyed yr unique on things.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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8 posted 05-20-2002 09:56 AM       View Profile for jamesjiao   Email jamesjiao   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit jamesjiao's Home Page   View IP for jamesjiao

Hmmm. interesting........

- James
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BRAVO!!! Wow, I love this, sweet friend, I can feel the rebelliousness behind these words and I am sure too your teacher must have got blown away by this, for you write so well at short poems just as the real answer is that any honest poem is the best poem! (smiles) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lyne, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

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10 posted 12-04-2002 12:28 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Hah!  Great stuff.  Not at all what I was expecting.

Personally, I don't care for poetry that's short and to the point, unless the point is an excellent one... and forgive me for not reading much depth into a hedgehog getting creamed by a car.  

Are you even still around here, Yu Lan?  Poetic Haven weeps without you.  Come back!



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11 posted 12-05-2002 04:32 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Thank you LP.. yeah, I'm still around but only just!! I'll be making a bit more of a come back these holidays, because I've finished school now, and can spare more time for kicking my brother off the computer.. Thanks for missing me!! ^^

Love,
Lynne

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

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12 posted 12-05-2002 05:31 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

He didn't understand the reference between Hedgehog and Headlights? Sighhh.

Gald you showed him

Maree.
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Hegemony!
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14 posted 12-06-2002 05:27 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Thanks Maree.. yes, "sigh".. unbelieveable what some ppl miss! ^^

Hehe.. hegemony..

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15 posted 12-10-2002 06:56 PM       View Profile for quietlydying   Email quietlydying   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for quietlydying

hahaha!!  that was great!

it reminds me of a poem i once wrote.  i was being overly harsh and making fun of someone, and yeah.  i wrote a poem about roadkill, which was quite amusing.

nicely done.

/jen/

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16 posted 12-16-2002 02:33 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Thanks Jen ^_^

Hey, I'd like to read ur Road kill poem.. is it posted here?

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17 posted 04-15-2003 12:35 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

I just couldn't resist the title and I wasn't dissappointed, I'm really enjoying reading and writing short poetry and this was no exception, thanks for sharing

Andrew
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Well well well, I have to say - I liked it, alot.  short, to the point, witty.

Don't tell Nan this (and Nan, if you're listening - no offense intended):

I could not stand the poetry portions of my English classes! One of my teachers was so oblivious to poetic form she felt that only work in iambic pentameter was acceptable.

Another teacher assinged us to write a poem whose only requirements were that it was more than 4 stanza's. I wrote this epic poem about the men's room "Gleeming white porcelin in the stalls, countered by graffitied walls. The way the toilets gurgle and flush, while on the floors lies a drunken lush..."  All he had to say was that the subject matter was silly and he failed me.

Yes I am embittered about the lack of true poetic appreciation in the grammar and high school teacher's community!  AAAUUUUUGGGHHHH!!!!

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Interesting little poem.  Quite comical.

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20 posted 04-17-2003 09:27 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Marshalzu - I was actually thinking of calling it 'Chinese Takeaways' for a laugh.. what do you think?
Thanks for reading!

JP - yeah, there are some horrific teachers out there.. Hehe, your poem sounds cool - have you posted it here?? I'd like to read it.. especially as your teacher failed you on it (how rude!) ^_^

Thanks Fracta, well, I certainly found it comical that my teacher didn't understand it, hehe..


Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

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