Yeah this is another one for my poetic writing portfolio, I'm trying to submit a range of poetry, ie some sad, some cheerful, loving, humerous, cheeky.. blahblahblah.. yeah, so, what do you think??
I think I need a breath mint,
Iíve swallowed mouldy play-dough.
I wasnít even hungry, but,
they kicked me ítil I ate.
I am old and tired now
gave up sucking yesterday.
With play-dough lunch lonely inside
Iím locked away in shame.
My replacementís young and cute,
already kissed the carpet.
Iím jealous because I canít suck,
canít even bite his dust!
I'm not sure about the last lines, but I can't quite pick what's wrong with them! Anybody help??
ďOne word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..Ē