Goodness, Yu Lan. This certainly is a breathtaking poem, very brief and powerfully depicted. The length and simplicity of it allows a lot of impact.
The image drawn here is very sorrowful, dark and well done. You also chose your title well.
It's difficult to say exactly why I love this poem so very much, more than likely your choice of words really appealed to me on every line. What more can I say, this is one good poem.
I think it would be a great poem for the portfolio, in fact it would make a wonderful first page, unless you feel it would overshadow the rest of your work. I haven't read enough of yours to accurately judge.
However, I know this is going straight into my personal library.
Thanks for a wonderful read, Yu Lan, and I wish you the very best of luck.
The children of the nobility are playing here. they look up at you with disgust as you come near.