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Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap


0 posted 06-12-2001 04:24 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

The night
crouches, expectant,
pressing impatience against
tenuous glass;
a regard dark and ancient
peers, studying insignificance.
The lamp spreads feeble fingers
against the pane, a surrender
to the beast beyond.

Outside, a rose
trembles on the stalk,
resting her head on the window
in repose, or defeat;
delicate yellow melts to cream-and-shadow,
pleading silently with darkness.

So grave a quiet is
a critical burden, and yet  
I shiver when winds move,
bellowing in their borrowed voices --
Noises stolen from crevices,
the sigh-and-whistle of eaves,
perhaps, or the secrets of grass –
murmured protests
of this space shaken from dreams.

© Copyright 2001 Linda Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 06-12-2001 07:41 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Well it's about time you wrote something, dear.  I was wondering if you were ever going to pick up the pen again.  You have not lost it, either.  This is not only an excellent depiction of a scene, it screams with emotion as well.  Loved it, love you.


Michael

Elizabeth Cor
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2 posted 06-12-2001 02:41 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Cor   Email Elizabeth Cor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Cor

Must be something in the air... everyone is losing their muse, only to recover with something dark & quiet.

These lines:

pressing impatience against
tenuous glass

Outside, a rose...
...resting her head on the window
in repose, or defeat;
delicate yellow melts to cream-and-shadow

Noises stolen from crevices,
the sigh-and-whistle of eaves,
perhaps, or the secrets of grass –
murmured protests
of this space shaken from dreams.

God, striking, makes me jealous to the teeth lol...

As a whole, makes me think that something is stirring in you, but refuses to come out... so you have to let cunning descriptions and quiet reverberations of something powerful between lines substitute for the blank absolute of passion. But maybe that's just me. More on this when I get the chance to chat with you later...

Both of you: CALL US. We need to go camping.

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (edited 06-12-2001).]

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3 posted 06-12-2001 03:51 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

I enjoyed this one. Very well done here!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Janet Marie
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4 posted 06-12-2001 11:39 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

The night
crouches, expectant,
pressing impatience against
tenuous glass;
a regard dark and ancient
peers, studying insignificance.
========================
Outside, a rose
trembles on the stalk,
resting her head on the window
in repose, or defeat;
delicate yellow melts to cream-and-shadow,
pleading silently with darkness.

So grave a quiet is
a critical burden, and yet  
I shiver when winds move,
===============================

I heard a rumor that one of my fav poets...
(and her cute boyfriend who can write good too)*wink* ROFL...
had posted over here...
my oh my, how I have missed your words Lady POE-tess.
And this was a perfect reminder of whats been missed...
those hauntingly beautiful images you do so well..which dress up the emotions you express with such intensity and your classic poectic phrasing and vocabulary.
this is excellent Linda...and its so great to get to read you.
take care
jm

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

Poet deVine
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5 posted 06-13-2001 02:06 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Ah...it's always a pleasure to read your work Linda. You are one of my favorites you know. This is so gently flowing it should only be read in a whisper!  
brian madden
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6 posted 06-15-2001 02:05 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

So grave a quiet is
a critical burden, and yet  
I shiver when winds move,
bellowing in their borrowed voices --
Noises stolen from crevices,
the sigh-and-whistle of eaves,
perhaps, or the secrets of grass –
murmured protests
of this space shaken from dreams.


a very haunting poem, one for the library.
excellent write
Fading Away
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7 posted 06-16-2001 07:31 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Very nicely done.  I liked this a LOT.  Awesome work.

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection.  Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

serenity blaze
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8 posted 06-18-2001 03:44 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

How well you painted dread, Linda! The feeling I got from this reminded me of a theme from "The World According To Garp"--'The Presence Of the Undertoad"--a chilling portrayal that reminded me a bit of an anxiety attack--and I'll shaddup before someone calls dem guys in the white coats--but I enjoyed this--wish you'd write more!!!
Sven
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9 posted 06-23-2001 06:16 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

ah, I've missed this kind of writing from you. . . you do it so well. . . you know, you were one of the first here whose work that I always read again and again, and it's my pleasure to do so once more. . .

there's always so much that I can see in what you write, this is no exception. . . it's multi-layered, and I'm sure that if I come back tomorrow and read it, I'll find something else. . .

wonderful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Honeybee
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Ontario, CANADA


10 posted 06-23-2001 06:25 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee


Linda, you write of a haunting moment so intricately and uniquely...I am speechless, there's just such an awesome depth of emotion here. I have read this several times, and each time I am even more blown away, I must save this for my library~

Take care,
Melissa~
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The Shores of Alone


11 posted 06-23-2001 10:13 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

This is brilliantly beautiful
Sandra
 
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