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voices in my mind (repost from open 10?)

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 06-01-2001 03:24 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

I know of affirmations
that I should recite,
and even words I find absurd
incite me in the night.
My subconscious,
reprimanding,
living in the
flesh, demanding,
judge and jury
notwithstanding...

voices echo in my mind.


Silences that should be kept
Stifled tears that should be wept
volcano grows
beneath the rug
where my memories were swept...

voices mocking in my mind.


Bridges leading anywhere
Taxi cabs are at my door
The roads curve long
in sweet "come on"
my soul in ache to taste of more...

voices beckon in my mind.

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brian madden
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1 posted 06-01-2001 07:09 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Silences that should be kept
Stifled tears that should be wept
volcano grows
beneath the rug
where my memories were swept...


A haunting verse, some wonderful images. repost or not, a great poem  

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 06-02-2001 12:06 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

I loved the flow to this one. Well done on it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Yu Lan
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since 04-13-2000
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3 posted 11-19-2001 02:14 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

"My subconscious,
reprimanding,
living in the
flesh, demanding, .... "

Not bad!   I like the feel of these lines, the rhythm you've established makes for good reading

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

 
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