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This is a school assignment... we were to listen to a song and write a poem about it. Here is mine, Moonlight Sonata. This isn't my usual style, it's a bit dark, but I thought you might like to see something different.  Enjoy!


The moon casts its light on the tips of the trees
Dead leaves dance their dance on the breath of the breeze
And then, like the light that descends from the sky
The spirits come down, from the bright stars they fly

As the dampness of night settles down on the moor
Glazing each blade of grass that is now their dance floor
The couples join hands and the couples join hearts
They’re all in their place as the sad music starts

The moon makes the light that shines into their eyes
Love known in their lives death could never deny
Together once more, they have no words to say
They dance in the moonlight, and dread coming of day

The most pitiful spirits are swaying alone
They’re waiting, still waiting for one of their own
Still loving the mortals, they sway to the beat
Although they’re alone, with no dark eyes to meet

And all the night long as winds blow soft and slow
These spirits know things that no mortal could know
Hold each other while flesh still exists in your being
Look upon love while your eyes are still seeing

For all will eventually go to the moor
We shall all take our place upon the dance floor
Do not be a lonely soul, hear what I say
Have someone to hold until coming of day

For now, as you walk on the dark moors at night
On glazed grass, under treetops engulfed in moonlight
You may hear the sad music to which the souls dance
Look for the lonely ones lacking romance

When you see the sky brighten, signaling day
At that moment when moonlight is fading away
Watch closely, you’ll see spirits ascend to the sky
And listen, you may hear their pitiful cry


"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

© Copyright 2001 Erica N. - All Rights Reserved
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Excellent Erica!! I think you captured the 'mood' of the sonata!  
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2 posted 05-26-2001 12:09 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Very very very very very good job!  Wow!  This is absolutely outstanding, Erica!     I'm completely impressed!
The way your style wove into this dark, romantic setting... just completely marvelous.  Everything about this poem really had an incredible impact on me.  The imagery was just amazing... I can't possibly praise you enough on this aspect of the poem.  I saw lonely souls swaying over blades of moor grass...
Just outstanding.  This is going into my personal library.
I think I have a new favourite from you, Erica.  
Keep up the amazing work.  Write in this tone more often, you are obviously very good at it!  
~Allan

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3 posted 05-26-2001 03:39 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

*sways to the Sonata* so this is what you think of when you hear this.......we think differently but hey...what could you have expected.
Well done tho. I enjoyed this.  

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As the dampness of night settles down on the moor
Glazing each blade of grass that is now their dance floor
The couples join hands and the couples join hearts
They’re all in their place as the sad music starts


the references of tormented love and the moors remind me of the book Wutherig heights
well written enjoyed the read.

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5 posted 06-01-2001 05:23 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

I don't know what this music makes me think of... but this is a beautiul interpretation, extremely well written. I think I shall have to think of your poem when I listen to this music now..

“One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..”

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6 posted 06-01-2001 11:46 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Wow Erica. You got all of that out of such a lovely piece of music? I am in awe of your talent! You are in the library for sure.

~AF~

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