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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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Walt, it was an honor! Thanks for putting up with the terza rima form!  One moment, all it took for life to change So easily, you took my breath away And even now, to me, you never age. One second, my life went from pause to play So directly, you filled my life with you And so I asked if you would come and stay One word is all it took, then my soul flew Above the pain that usually fills days One look was all… to do that thing you do One day I will capture your loving praise Above that heartache worn-out from a cloud Heaven is higher, in your perfect ways One hearts’ prayer for soulmate to be found You’re the answer, although you don’t realize I quiver at each footstep and each sound One last time I will look into your eyes And one last time I will long to kiss you For now, you and I are each other's guise  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 05-20-2001).] |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Absolutely gorgeous work you two! You pair well together!  *Krista Knutson* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great! I really liked this. You two did wonderful.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Nice!!!!! terza rima? I'm not familiar--that's it! I'm hanging out with the teens from now on! You guys are amazing--I learn more from you in two weeks and you are so much more fun! (Walt is a teen at heart, yanno!) Fantastic job, loved this, Lovebug. Now somebody point me in the direction of instruction of terza rima???? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful!!! I really liked this. And the form is great! |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Serenity, terza rima isn't exactly modern. Dante used it in "The Divine Comedy". It's a very old Italian form. It consists of stanzas made up of three lines of iambic pentameter, where the rhyme schemes are woven: a-b-a, b-c-b, c-d-c, d-e-d, esc... And here's my quote du jour: EASIER SAID THAN DONE! "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Lordy me This is really beautiful work. WOW! Excellent writing the both of you Maree |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the whole poem was pure beauty!!...you two did a great job on writing this...i really liked it i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Oh, well done you guys.. mm, this is lovely.. “One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..” |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
what a wonderful team you guys make... enjoyed this . "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I read this one earlier, and to be fully honest, I saved it to read again before responding. It's simply beautiful. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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