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LoveBug
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0 posted 05-20-2001 12:28 AM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LoveBug

Walt, it was an honor! Thanks for putting up with the terza rima form!  


One moment, all it took for life to change
So easily, you took my breath away
And even now, to me, you never age.

One second, my life went from pause to play
So directly, you filled my life with you
And so I asked if you would come and stay

One word is all it took, then my soul flew
Above the pain that usually fills days
One look was all… to do that thing you do

One day I will capture your loving praise
Above that heartache worn-out from a cloud
Heaven is higher, in your perfect ways

One hearts’ prayer for soulmate to be found
You’re the answer, although you don’t realize
I quiver at each footstep and each sound

One last time I will look into your eyes
And one last time I will long to kiss you
For now, you and I are each other's guise




"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

[This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 05-20-2001).]

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1 posted 05-20-2001 12:48 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Absolutely gorgeous work you two!  You pair well together!  

*Krista Knutson*

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If Heaven's here on Earth..." ~Tracy Chapman

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2 posted 05-20-2001 12:09 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

This was great! I really liked this. You two did wonderful.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 05-20-2001 03:14 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Nice!!!!! terza rima? I'm not familiar--that's it! I'm hanging out with the teens from now on! You guys are amazing--I learn more from you in two weeks and you are so much more fun! (Walt is a teen at heart, yanno!) Fantastic job, loved this, Lovebug. Now somebody point me in the direction of instruction of terza rima????
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4 posted 05-20-2001 03:53 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wonderful!!! I really liked this. And the form is great!
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5 posted 05-21-2001 06:27 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Serenity, terza rima isn't exactly modern.  

Dante used it in "The Divine Comedy". It's a very old Italian form. It consists of stanzas made up of three lines of iambic pentameter, where the rhyme schemes are woven: a-b-a, b-c-b, c-d-c, d-e-d, esc...

And here's my quote du jour: EASIER SAID THAN DONE!

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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6 posted 05-21-2001 07:47 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh Lordy me
This is really beautiful work.
WOW!
Excellent writing the both of you  

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the whole poem was pure beauty!!...you two did a great job on writing this...i really liked it

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8 posted 06-01-2001 06:00 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Oh, well done you guys.. mm, this is lovely..

“One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..”

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9 posted 06-01-2001 07:11 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

what a wonderful team you guys make... enjoyed this .

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Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

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10 posted 09-29-2006 10:15 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

I read this one earlier, and to be fully honest, I saved it to read again before responding. It's simply beautiful.

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