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Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2001-05-06 01:04 AM

Faces blend together
smiles and frowns become one
bodies merge, voices swell
my life has come undone

The tears that fall are counted
by the steps I take in retreat
Bitter is jealousy's flavor
as I smile at my defeat

She will have you nonetheless
I cannot make it otherwise
for I see you as just a man
she sees you as a prize

If you thought me worthy of your love
those feelings would be shown
There is no satisfaction in
a love in which I am alone

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

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1 posted 2001-05-06 01:38 AM

Oh Sharon, I felt the sadness here.

Hugs

great poem

Maree

Irie
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since 1999-12-01

Posts 1493
Washington State

2 posted 2001-05-06 03:03 AM

Sharon,

The emotions and feelings in this poem reached out and squeezed on my heart.
I remember this feeling very clearly.

~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

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3 posted 2001-05-06 12:28 PM

Great work, PdV! I could also feel the emotion in this one, so very powerful. Thank you for sharing it with us!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

4 posted 2001-05-06 01:08 PM

Thank you...I asked acire for a phrase to use to write a poem and he gave me the last line in this poem, so part of the thanks for the inspiration goes to him!

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

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Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-05-06 05:12 PM

Wow, PdV. This is an awesome piece. It's so emotional.. right from the heart. Wonderful work.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

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viginia

6 posted 2001-05-07 02:51 PM

this is really beautiful writing, thank you for posting it. i also liked your note in the reply, i often start my poems from the end with a good last line and work backwards

it's better that way

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Jamie
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Blue Heaven

7 posted 2001-05-07 11:38 PM

A beautiful poem I have found hidden here...

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Temptress

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8 posted 2001-05-09 01:22 AM

*tears* I know this, and you have conveyed it very well here, Sharon.

Temptress

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9 posted 2001-05-09 01:22 AM

*tears* I know this, and you have conveyed it very well here, Sharon.

Joyce Johnson

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10 posted 2001-05-09 08:28 PM

Well let her have him, she'll find out,
He's just an unfaithful, straying lout. Joyce

Dopey Dope

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11 posted 2001-05-13 02:37 PM

Well done, but the sadness in this one is very powerful.....i feel you here Sharon.
Well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

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12 posted 2001-05-27 09:17 PM

this piece goes to the reader on a emotional level...and i love that

...awesome poem here...sad yet very powerful.

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

13 posted 2001-06-01 05:15 AM

Have you ever felt this Sharon? If not, then you've done an amazing job of portraying this silent bitterness.. that person's heart has been torn out, so clearly.. and the tears are not sure whether they should be shed in sadness, bitterness, anger or pain.. but you have shown that all of these rolled into one leaves such an ache.. I loved this piece, and for a poem that acire inspired, this is exceptional.. okok, joking, sorry acire.. ^_^ No, truly, this is lovely PdV

Love,
Lynne

“One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..”

Tequilia_Sunrise
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14 posted 2004-07-08 12:47 PM

very well said

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