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Shattered Silence (Dark Angel and Fading Away, Duet Club)

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Fading Away
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0 posted 05-05-2001 12:23 AM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Fading Away

Alone I cry
and tears cover these
blood-orange cheeks
two single lines of pain
showing of
'my life,
  my sorrow'

I walk the hazel of
this land
stooped like death
where grass and branches
scratch at my skin
they form
tiny tracks of nothing
not even my brows are amused
they remain
straight and thick over
shattered sight


my mind bruises against the
uneven edges of
  'this reality
   this silence'
and what remains
are only the memories
I'm my own stranger
complete with blurry reflections
of a childhood
I once knew

In my darkness
I fade away
the sun rise is wasted
and it's setting
pale
only the moon
though dim
tweaks a glow
in the filmy night
to comfort me

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer Floyd - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-05-2001 12:41 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Oh wow this one hit me hard. Well done the two of you!!!!!!
That came out even better than I ever expected it to....you two worked quite well together. Once again....wow on it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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I admire it daily

Jamie
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2 posted 05-05-2001 12:59 AM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

Did you two cheat?--- Spend like hours on the phone together??---   This is really really good,,  

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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3 posted 05-05-2001 03:20 AM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

This is very dramatic, lots of emotion in it... which is hard to do as a collaboration.  Very well done, it's quite obvious that the two of you really connected when you wrote this.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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4 posted 05-05-2001 04:27 AM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

wow...this hit me hard also..
great job on thsi ...i'm looking so forward in doing this..great job you two..i loved this!..

..?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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5 posted 05-05-2001 06:18 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wow....this is great!!!
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6 posted 05-05-2001 08:20 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

i debated because if I reply right now then it is a tie on replies between y'alls and ours. heheh awesome poem yuh guys.
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7 posted 05-05-2001 08:30 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Another fantastic duet! Great job!
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8 posted 05-05-2001 09:10 AM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Wow... this one knocked me off of my feet. I can really feel the emotion in this one. Great work, you two. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli
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GAWD!!!  This is amazing.  You couldn't even tell the difference between each stanzas.  I am assuming you 2 took your turn.  ~*stands up and applauds*~

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So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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10 posted 05-05-2001 11:32 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Fantastic you two!!  

You two write great together!  

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but I know Who holds the future.

I don't question YOUR existance - GOD

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11 posted 05-05-2001 08:23 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Hi all  
THANKYOU you wonderful poets so very much for your kind and lovely replies and for taking the time to read  

And Marie,
I want to tell you that it was a real pleasure writing with you and that you were/are a wonderful inspiration.   I look forward to writing with you again  

I thank you

Maree  
Martie
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12 posted 05-06-2001 11:31 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Great job, you guys!
Fading Away
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13 posted 05-06-2001 05:09 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Yes, thank you all for the awesome replies.. I don't tell you enough, but you guys rock!!  

Maree, it was awesome working with you too.  You're a really talented poet, and it's a honor to say I wrote this with you    Until the next collaboration..

Thank again, everyone  

--Marie

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Yu Lan
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14 posted 05-07-2001 02:39 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

wow, yeah the styles are similar in each stanza, this is so well done! Emotional and.. WOW.. ^_^

Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu

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15 posted 05-07-2001 02:59 PM       View Profile for banburycross   Email banburycross   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for banburycross

the incredilbe talent of you both has blended to create a msterpiece.  this is truly incredible writing.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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16 posted 05-08-2001 11:59 AM       View Profile for Linc   Email Linc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Linc

Hey,

    This...This...This is superb I mean 2 of my favorite poets and a third whom I have never had the honor to meet go and form a this! I loved it and its going into my library. Until your next poems

          -- Linc

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17 posted 09-29-2006 09:54 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

Proof....the whole may indeed be greater than the sum of its parts. The very fact that two let their writing coalesce...that is magic.

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