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I Was The First! (Blank Verse from the Poetry Workshop)
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I Was The First! For many years I lived along a creek And navigated down-stream quite a bit To find a glimpse of what the end may bring -- A river wild that put a spell on me One day I packed my bags and got my boat Not beaver, nor a hunt this time my goal But merely satisfying needs within Exploring wildest river known to me What would be at the end of this wild beast? Enormous lake where many rivers meet? And banks much further than the eye can reach? Or would it end at sea to mingle in? So off I was and slept along the way And during night the deer and wolf stopped by Raccoon stole food and ruined my supplies Misfortune could not stop me from my quest! On berries, blue and fish I stayed alive A rabbit old, occasionally snared My pipe, a good old friend and company While birds sang me a lullaby to sleep The river started flowing faster yet And danger lurked around each bend I sailed A rapid, strong or whirlpool to avoid But bit by bit I conquered every stream Although I must admit it was a fight With nature of a kind beyond my dreams Inferiority revealed to me By flowing faster on this river wild One day I heard a sound not known to me And for a single moment time stood still A mile ahead a waterfall so grand Of such a beauty I could hardly breathe I had to reach the shore to save my butt A test of utmost strength to man and boat My muscles aching, asking for relief Another 15 feet and I'd be safe The Indians would not allow me rest Their arrows aimed to kill this weary man My one chance of survival straight ahead By going over falls without an end Niagara Falls is where you'll find my bones A man's heart broken, story never told! Another man got famous and not me! Discovering these falls y'all come to see So now my bones lay at the bottom of The greatest beauty one has ever seen My spirit bound till somebody believes I was the first discovering the Falls Dear folks, who read this story, set me free By throwing in a dime to break the spell For if you do, I may at last find peace Niagara Falls, lay not my soul to waste |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is marvelous! It had me laughing out loud towards the end, such a light-hearted poem! I would like to see this published somehow, maybe put on a plaque near the falls or something to encourage people to throw coins in. This was such a creative idea, I really did enjoy it a lot! As far as the blank verse goes, you did marvelously and I see no real flaws. There were a few that sounded off to me but really weren't... so I'll just keep that to myself.  Keep up the great work. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this very much. It was well written and I liked it a lot. You should post more becuase I haven't seen much poems of you here. I enjoyed it though.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
beautiful poem.. i really enjoyed the read.. keep writing munda!   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-05-2001).] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Took me long enough didn't it?  LOLMunda you did a fantastic job!! I love this one! It takes you right in there, seeing the danger and all. BRAVO!! I agree with Allan, it should be posted by the falls. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Well thank you Allan! What a nice thing to say. I must admit though my imagination is as wild as that river. Thank you oh Dopey One. Unfortunately I have very little time at the moment for writing, but I promise one per month. Thank you Albert. Your words are highly appreciated. Dovey! You flew all the way to the Haven especially for me! Thank you M'Lady for your kindness and lovely words. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Hi Munda, I enjoyed this poem a lot, it made me smile...I visit your homepage and readed your poems as they are very good. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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