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kaile
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0 posted 04-28-2001 10:30 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for kaile

I was a bonsai tree
when I was young
Conditioned to grow only
in directions my parents faniced
They burdened my roots with heavy chains
They snipped away any branches
that showed signs of fostering

I used to fanasise
about running away from home
Taking refuge in a secret place
I would call my own
Where I would witness the sunrise in my treehouse
and befriend the bear living inside the cave
Where I would grow peas and beans
and fuss about whether my hens were laying eggs
Where I would finally be myself
and explore life on my own terms

We grow up. We mature.
We turn cynical
Our childhood fantasies are
tucked into the drawers of our minds
ashamed that we acknowledge them
as invalid irrelevant silly nothings

It was only when i stumbled upon writing
(by accident!)
that all these childhood follies
exploded and sizzed and gushed out
much like a dormant volcano
finally having a say
after years of suppression

I was free to discover the me in me
Writing offered a poetic haven perhaps
but more importantly(sorry, im preaching)
it became my sanity.

[This message has been edited by faterider (edited 04-28-2001).]

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1 posted 04-28-2001 11:58 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Such true words. Very well done Kaile!  
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2 posted 04-29-2001 12:02 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kaile~
Very, very well done !
And are we ever glad you blossomed into a poet !
~*Marge*~

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3 posted 04-29-2001 01:43 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Yes...writing does put the charm back into many things...it is like seeing with loving eyes in a way.  I very much enjoyed this poem.
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4 posted 04-29-2001 03:19 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

I really enjoyed this! You did so well on the challenge!! Wow...very well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 04-29-2001 10:44 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Nice job.  The parts that were in brackets really didn't do much for me though, they sort of ruined a bit of the feel of it.  Just my humble opinion, of course.  
Still I liked the sentiments.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
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6 posted 04-30-2001 01:31 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

thank you for all your comments and allan, i will think about what you said about the brackets
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7 posted 04-30-2001 02:05 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Challenge well met!  I really enjoyed your second stanza, the way you described the childhood fantasy.  Took me back in time!  I also especially liked your intro, very nice detail.

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8 posted 05-01-2001 12:05 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

Nicole, i enjoyed your offering too and for you to say that you enjoyed my piece makes me feel good....thanks
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9 posted 05-03-2001 05:41 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

I really loved this one Kaile!    
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10 posted 05-07-2001 08:02 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

thanx Munda! im glad you enjoyed
 
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