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Fury's Weather (Tanka, PdV's Challenge)

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Allan Riverwood
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0 posted 03-30-2001 05:36 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Within the darkness
Within the falling of rain
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Candle burns the windowpane
Fury's weather, why remain?

(There.  I used the "Tanka" format.  Go me.    Hope you all enjoyed it.)

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1 posted 03-30-2001 06:38 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Allan, I did indeed like it!! And it's nice to SEE you!!!    
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Nice to see you....good tanka....this is the first i've seen you try and you did quite well.
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I'd say well done, but I don't know if it is (I have no idea how to write a tanka!)    BUT, that's beside the point - I enjoyed it nontheless, challenge well met!  
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4 posted 05-10-2001 10:12 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Nice Allan!
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5 posted 05-11-2001 02:04 PM       View Profile for Linc   Email Linc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Linc

Hey,

    This is really cool I might have to tanka one day   I really liked. Until your next masterpiece (someone tell me if I am not posed to be here Marie told me its a Senior Member form and I an not a senior member yet

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I'm a little confused now as to what the tanka form is, as I've seen so many different versions of it, lol.. So.. um.. what is it? I think I'm getting it mixed up with a cinquain.  
I'm not sure this would be one of your best Allan, there is nothing particularly WRONG with it, it's not bad, but it hasn't quite got that.. grab, that a lot of your poetry does..
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7 posted 08-17-2001 08:55 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

yeah it does stink!  hehe... I was rushing rushing to get it done though, and had no ideas.  

tanka is 5-7-5-7-7 sylls  
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Heh.. def. not your best, deary   But it was pretty cool nonetheless.  Nice images   I should write a tanka... but you know me a formats.  I like this one!  

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