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LoveBug
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0 posted 03-06-2001 09:55 AM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LoveBug

I'm messing with a little syllable scheme here. I hope it turned out ok, and I really hope it didn't take away from what I'm trying to say. I don't want to start a big debate here, but I do want to remind you all to think after you read this. Thanks for reading.

Head bowed low
In her maternal grief
The rain pours down
But her tears run faster
As she mourns the loss of a son

She looks back
To when he was born
The sheer beauty
Of the gift of a life
As she mourns the loss of a son

She looks back
When he was a child
The perfect boy
Momma’s little angel
As she mourns the loss of a son

She looks back
He hit his manhood
He changed so much
He turned away from her
She knows that’s when she lost her son

She tried hard
To kill his demons
To make him whole
She wasn't always there
She had to work… as he got worse

She looks on
As the police take him
He killed today
He shot-up the schoolhouse
She peers into his eyes…

Nothing

The others
Look at her with hate
She meets their eyes
They seem to forget that
She also mourns for her lost son

No excuse
She knows it’s her fault
But she looks back
To her other young son
She refuses to lose this one

Think, my friends
Of the mourning mom
Could this be you?
With your tears streaming down
As you mourn the loss of a child?

Friends, take time
Be there for your kids
And please be kind
Since the mourning mother
Has also loved… and lost her child





"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli



[This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 03-06-2001).]
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1 posted 03-06-2001 10:54 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Erica--You have looked with sympathetic eyes at such a sad situation...It must be so hard for his parents, for they must also feel somehow responsible for his actions...with the thought forever in the back of their minds, "what could we have done that would have prevented this?" Good job with this poem!
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2 posted 03-06-2001 04:29 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

My goodness! This is heartbreaking beautiful and very true. Great job LoveBug!
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3 posted 03-07-2001 07:48 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

"I wish I had a talent"- quote by Erica

yea yea sure.......see! Look what I'm saying!!!! You're so talented and this proves it!

So HA!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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I admire it daily
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Erica, I read your heart in this peace. You captured the mother's feelings perfectly. Well done!
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5 posted 03-09-2001 04:18 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Erica, the syllables are fine...now on to my feelings about the piece....parents cannot be blamed for everything their children do...some of it yes, but there comes a point in time where the actions are solely those of the child, and people must realize it. The parents feel pain over the loss of their child and whatever trouble their child has gotten into, and they don't need self-righteous people preaching at them and glaring at them. Anyways, beautiful work....you captured it perfectly.

P.S. Is this related to the school shootings?
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6 posted 03-10-2001 10:57 AM       View Profile for Romy   Email Romy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Romy

But many people do blame the parents for the child's actions. It made my heart hurt to read this...I love my kids so much and only try to do the best for them, but ultimately they have to make decisions and choices on their own. I would never want to be in the shoes of a parent facing something like that.
Your poem has a lot of emotional impact, good job.

Debbie
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Wow... this poem is magnificent. The syllable scheme made me squeal with glee. Of course, you probably expected that from me.
Now everyone else... I'm sure that Erica was writing the emotions of guilt that would be portrayed by the mother in this situation, and not necessarily her personal opinions. What is reflected in this piece is what the mother feels.
I'll agree that we cannot blame anyone other than the son himself for these happenings. Not the mother, not the media, ~just~ the son.
Once again, this poem is truly wonderful and I am putting it into my library.
~Allan

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Erica, this is incredibly moving....I am utterly blown away...you portrayed the guilt, the pain a mother would feel if her son had commited such an act..and you did it in a raw, powerful way. It's good to show people all aspects of things and this is definitely one that not many people think of. Absolutely stunning work my friend, I'm impressed!

*Krista Knutson*

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Can't hide I can't fly
I'm struggling with the limits of this ordinary life..." ~Tracy Chapman
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u expressed this so well..
a very powerful and very true poem
wow...
jus amazing how a poem can touch the reader..
i really liked the emotions in the poem
thanks for sharing
and keep writing

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death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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10 posted 04-28-2001 10:07 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

thanx for showing us things from the mother's point of view. sometimes we lash all out at the parents when such tragedies happen and forget that they themselves are suffering too....

a wonderful read and in MHO, one that more people should have the opportunity to read and understand
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