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The Two of Us

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Irish Rose
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0 posted 02-12-2001 04:40 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Irish Rose

(I know, I know, I left but Aimster wrote one, so I thought I would too!)

The two of us smell the rain
and stand waiting to be clean.
We wait and lift up our eyes
and our ears and hear tomorrow’s thunder
Do you hear the sound?
It trickles through the core
of a heart-only one heart.
Smell the petals and taste them.
We are not afraid to stand there
The two of us will cleanse completely.
and when the storm is over
one will turn and walk away in remembrance;
giving of her passion
and she will smile.
She will be released for she isn’t needed anymore.
The other will continue standing
and confront many storms
She will once open wholly writ.
Serenity will emerge with a
new birth.
Love will fill outstretched hands,
and she will fall to her knees
praying for understanding.
She will smile with a new perception and know truth.
and never be afraid, or alone again
For she smelled the rain
and followed the signs to completion.



"I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis







[This message has been edited by Kathleen (edited 02-12-2001).]
© Copyright 2001 Kathleen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-12-2001 06:07 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Hey i really liked the end there......she followed the path to completion.....awww very nice.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
Sunshine
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2 posted 02-13-2001 09:27 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Nice to see your spirit, Kathleen....for I know you're "really" not here....{~,^}
Gene
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3 posted 02-13-2001 12:01 PM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

Kathleen,

What do you mean you left? Not from PIP? We have to see more wonderful poems like this.



Gene
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Irish Rose
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4 posted 02-13-2001 01:00 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

I know, Gene !! I'm trying to heal from a health problem, but well, thank you so much for this encouragement, I do love the Sanctuary and the Spiritual forum has been such a blessing, so ....well............look for me around

"I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis


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5 posted 02-15-2001 09:38 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Kathleen,

Perfect ending my friend. And you know, you are never alone.

Jennifer


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats
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6 posted 12-04-2002 12:32 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I love the storyline of this.  Very interesting, seems like it could be a really intriguing short film or something.  You give so much depth to this simple scene, all of the symbols underlying it really make the mind gape in awe...

Especially the ending, which left me very satisfied.  This is a very well-written poem.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

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