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JOY 14
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0 posted 02-05-2001 10:44 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

Under the stage
Under the actor's heavy feet
Lead feet
Pounding the ceiling
Under which I huddle
Cuddle fake furs
In my hands
Smell their must
Blow away their dust
In the dark
Under the stage
Voices
Faint but loud
Calling out to the empty auditorium
Dress rehearsal
The real performance is tomorrow
I won't be here
Feeling for junk in
Weathered boxes
Left out in the rain too long,
Left soft, flat
Overflowing with costumes
Spilling over on my feet
Or at least where I think my feet are.




Our doubts are traitors,
And make us loose the good we oft might win
By fearing to attempt.
~Shakespeare
© Copyright 2001 Kristen Joy Jacobus - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 02-05-2001 10:51 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

joy--wonderful visuals and atmesphere in this...so glad to see you here in Haven.
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2 posted 02-06-2001 08:42 AM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

Made me feel like a little girl going through an old trunk!  I loved the feeling.
Thank you!

"I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis


Gene
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3 posted 02-06-2001 11:51 AM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

Joy,

This is another one of your wonderful moments from life. I felt like I was there at that moment--as if it were happening as you were writing it down.

It seems that you like to write in "the present" this way. I would suggest that you keep your poems as a journal, expressing your daily routines. It would be so much better than a typical plain old journal of notes. But I'll bet that's what you're already doing.  


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4 posted 02-06-2001 11:55 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Very well done, Joy....wonderful imagery.
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NIcely done here Joy......I got the full feeling within the poem.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
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Wonderful imagery Joy: you give the reader just enough detail to really captivate and set the imagination running full speed. Well done  

Suburbia is where the developer bulldozes out the trees, then names the streets after them. - Bill Vaughan
JOY 14
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7 posted 02-06-2001 05:18 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

Martie, thanks. I'm glad to be here.

Kathleen, I'm glad I brought some 'happy' memories. I love those.

Gene, I do do that!   Actualy I write a combo of rambling thoughts and poetry like this.

Elizabeth, that's what I was going for. a picture in your head.

DD, glad it's full and not partial. lol

Colin, imagination is a gift and I'm more than happy to invite people to use theirs. That's one of the many joys of writing poetry don't you think?

Thanks all. Smiles    

Joy

Our doubts are traitors,
And make us loose the good we oft might win
By fearing to attempt.
~Shakespeare
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8 posted 02-23-2001 10:37 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

well done joy...as everyone else has said, wonderful imagery

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.
JOY 14
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9 posted 02-24-2001 09:39 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

Thanks acire.

Joy
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