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ShadowRider
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since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

0 posted 2002-02-12 09:05 PM

Beneath It All

seemingly, a despicable task
dirt beneath fingernails that needed purged
she sewed her feelings to a mended sleeve
while the rest of her robe unraveled
one silken thread at a time
seldom-asked-to-the-dance, she was ignored
yet never forgiven for looks that made her God's disciple
yielding to a bequest that she felt was more pity than favour
she said yes
when I asked her to dance
We shamelessly pranced thru wavering reed-people
hollow, unbending faces so much taller than us
so they could look down on us I supposed
I awakened her Eden with a kiss when the dances were done
of course she could never possess the luxury of my soul
of course she cried with grievous expulsion of want
For all the nights the lamb went hungry
and no-one troubled themselves to ask her
for but a single dance.
God - forgive me for not seeing that her appearance
was but a silent wall
the Princess lurked behind her vision of alabaster white
We broke down that monument together -
with furious fury and purple-heart medals freshly shined
with tailored lasting memories those evenings
Changed forever, we both gained confidence in ourselves
for all of our dances
yet to come

(a true story of a great friendship during highschool and college)

[This message has been edited by ShadowRider (02-12-2002 09:13 PM).]

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

1 posted 2002-02-12 09:11 PM

This is nicely done...I like the hopeful note at the end.

sky

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2002-02-12 09:18 PM

Changed forever, we both gained confidence in ourselves
for all of our dances
yet to come
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Beautiful Jeff. Enjoyed so much tonight!
~Smiles and hugs, Nancy~

~Love transcends time and space~

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

3 posted 2002-02-12 09:35 PM

Wow, a great piece about finding the beauty within a person. Loved the last three lines, what a sequel it hints at.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

4 posted 2002-02-13 12:49 PM

OH MY WORD! ohh..no..YOUR WORD! LOL! This is absolutely BREATHTAKING! I can't really tell you how much I enjoyed this. I'm so amazed that it isn't within my abilities to right now.
WOW!~

For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me.

Dulcinea
Senior Member

since 2001-07-22

Posts 774
IN

5 posted 2002-02-13 10:16 AM

What a very sweet memory. Not many people would create, and then hold dear such memories...beautiful!

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