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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2002-02-11 05:41 AM



it never was competition
between me and the pizza man
it was the condition
of the position
and was all relative to time
and to do with dying
he was there first
when cleo was hungry

and she did say
his biscuit of love
filled her comfort belly
and when he asked is she would
she said she did
until death did them part
and they would live
happily ever after
if she could remodel the bedroom

she did leave me the note
when I was washing windows
and she was straightening
table cloths in her short shirt
on tables that didn't have cloths
or customers but did have
a view that some men would die for
and he did right after
they made love each night

the note said she always waited then
in her bed with still want on
and nothing much else
and if I wanted I could come
she would leave the door open
if I would help her with her empty
she said she couldn't sleep
and always dreamed of it
being full just  a few times
so she could finally die


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1 posted 2002-02-11 08:51 AM


yes.....
Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2002-02-11 09:00 AM


thanks.....
for saying yes

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4 posted 2002-02-11 11:03 PM


There is a certain flavor that exceptional poems have....a flow, a way to say things and create images in a way that hasn't been done....a simplicity that causes the reader to fill in all the blanks and see the images before his eyes.......this poem has all that and more. It is comfortable....thank you for sharing
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5 posted 2002-02-12 05:45 AM


archivinghost, Thanks for the gentle bump

balladeer, humble thanks sir

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