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amusemi
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0 posted 2002-02-10 09:18 PM


                                You are my life

                                        You are the roar of my ocean
                                And my stars at night
                        You are the air I breathe
                And my sunshine at dawn
        You are the flame of my fire
And my moon in the sky
        You are the rain in my storm
                And the joy in my smile
                        You are the collision in my crash
                                And the drug from which I heal
                                        You are the words of my novel
                                And the foundation of my mansion
                        You are the song of my music
                And the rose of my garden

                                You are my life

[This message has been edited by amusemi (02-10-2002 09:19 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-02-10 09:24 PM




(smiles) Sooooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, you are an angel to us all and a delightful friend to all our hearts that we love so so much! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is breathtaking, I'[m adding this to my library! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


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2 posted 2002-02-10 09:26 PM


awwwwww so he is your EVERYTHING  
so sweet and romantic

[This message has been edited by RosePetal (02-10-2002 09:27 PM).]

Alan
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3 posted 2002-02-10 09:47 PM


This is a wonderful read. I love the format that you placed it in.
alan

ShadowRider
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4 posted 2002-02-10 11:00 PM


Hi Amusemi!   Love the layout and sentiment in each line.  It was not all sugarcoated, but true-to-life, as all relationships must be.  
You are the rain in my storm
                                    And the joy in my smile
                                            You are the collision in my crash
Those are some great lines to symbolize the good and the tough in a pair,
although in the context they are written, they have such hope and promise.
It is recognizing what we are, not what we are not, and accepting them that
makes a relationship strong.  May you have the best in that,
and the best in life,
tSR

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5 posted 2002-02-10 11:12 PM



"You are the roar of my ocean
~*~
You are the rain in my storm
~*~
You are the words of my novel
~*~
You are the song of my music
~*~
You are my life"
LOVE this these lines especially

Saunni
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6 posted 2002-02-10 11:43 PM


Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful! Loved this

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

Nan
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7 posted 2002-02-12 08:14 AM


Lovely - in both thought and presentation..
vlraynes
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8 posted 2002-02-13 11:40 PM



amusemi-
   Very beautifully penned sentiments.
   Just lovely.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Madame Chipmunk
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9 posted 2002-02-14 12:34 PM


This is very beautiful, Amusemi...I love the presentation as well as the lovely writing.
Very well done!
This one should get a prize!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

PearlsB4Swine
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10 posted 2002-02-14 09:02 PM


I love the way this is presented, and the material, super write!
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